Lettre De Motivation

[St4tik]

Bonjour, dans le cadre de mes études, je dois fournir une lettre de motivation. Pourrais-je avoir votre avis la concernant ?

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in the Java developer position posted on the Stepstone’s website.

I have a bachelor's degree in computer science and I have now two years’ experience in Java development at Smals. I was responsible for the development and programming of several web applications for the social security and health care sectors. It gave me the opportunity to take part in several projects, to acquire a solid experience in mobile development, to work with various technologies and to handle the responsibilities of lead developer and release manager.

The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing: I have always wanted to become an IT consultant and now that I have some experience, I am ready to take the leap. I am a dynamic, ambitious and motivated person who can work under pressure and face all types of work challenges. I have excellent communication and interpersonal skills that help me during interaction with clients for understanding their requirements. I am fluent in French, English and Dutch and I also have a bachelor in Graphics design.

I believe that my strong technical experience and education will make me a very competitive candidate for this position and I think that it will be a great experience to work with an organization like yours.

I hope that this short presentation has convinced you of my seriousness, my enthusiasm and my dedication. I hope we can discuss more over a personal interview.

Looking forward to hearing from you,

Sincerely

Je vous en remercie d'avance,

Julien

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Dear Sir or Madam,

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The opportunity presented in this listing is very appealing: I have always wanted to become an IT consultant and now that I have some experience, I am ready to take the leap plunge. I am a dynamic, ambitious and motivated person who can work under pressure and face all types of work challenges. I have excellent communication and interpersonal skills that help me during interaction with clients for understanding to understand their requirements. I am fluent in French, English and Dutch and I also have a bachelor's degree in Graphics design.

I believe that my strong technical experience and education will make me a very competitive candidate for this position and I think that it will be a great experience to work with an organization like yours.

I hope that this short presentation has convinced you of my seriousness, my enthusiasm and my dedication. I hope we can discuss more over a personal interview.

I look forward to hearing from you,

Yours sincerely,

Bonne chance.

[St4tik]

Un tout grand merci pour vos corrections / remarques