Corection D Un Dialogue

[coco88]

Bonsoir pouvez vous me corriger mon dialogue SVP. Voici le sujet d abord : you have been beaten by your boyfriendyou confess to you best friend on fb. Write the dialogue.

M- i have to say something but promise me that you never tell to anyone E- what's going on? You know that you can trust me M- yes i know but it's so hard and i'm scared E- scared ? About what ? Somebody hurt you ? M- its about my boyfriend

E- karim ? What he did ? Its over between us ? M- please just don'd judge me you i need to talk.... Karim beat me but sometimes its my fault i know that he loves me and he just want protect me

E- what ? Just stop ! You can say that and i don't understand why karim do that but if he beat him you couldn't stay with him and when it started ?

M- i'm very lost but this pain it so hard it started a long time ago but i think that i need help but nevertheless i love him

E- oh please ! Don't talk me of love you are a smart girl you are not stupid and first of all you left him and you come live with me

M- i can't leave him he done not agree about that E- i don't care i protect you please just listen me and do what i tell you. Where is he ? M- i don't know i'm alone E- take what you need and come to me M- maybe he stoped to hit me if i just talked to him E- don't panic you come to me and we seen just relax now you must be in a shelter.

Ps: m=premiere personne et e = deuxième personne du dialogue amie

[Jean B]

Bonsoir pouvez vous me corriger mon dialogue SVP. Voici le sujet d abord : you have been beaten by your boyfriendyou confess to you best friend on fb. Write the dialogue.

M- i have to say something but promise me that you never tell to anyone E- what's going on? You know that you can trust me M- yes i know but it's so hard and i'm scared E- scared ? About what ? Somebody hurt you ? M- its about my boyfriend

E- karim ? What he did ? Its over between us ? M- please just don'd judge me you i need to talk.... Karim beat me but sometimes its my fault i know that he loves me and he just want xxx protect me

E- what ? Just stop ! You can say that and i don't understand why karim do that but if he beat him you couldn't stay with him and when it started ?

M- i'm very lost but this pain it xxx so hard it started a long time ago but i think that i need help but nevertheless i love him

E- oh please ! Don't talk me of love you are a smart girl you are not stupid and first of all you left him and you come live with me

M- i can't leave him he done not agree about that E- i don't care i protect you please just listen xxx me and do what i tell you. Where is he ? M- i don't know i'm alone E- take what you need and come to me M- maybe he stoped to hit would stop hitting me if i just talked to him E- don't panic you come to me and we seen just relax now you must be in a shelter.

Ps: m=premiere personne et e = deuxième personne du dialogue amie

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Les xxx indiquent une omission.

Entre autres fautes signalées, il est quand même anormal que tu ne saches pas construire le prétérit à la forme interrogative.

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