Expression Écrite

[battou]

Bonsoir, si tu peux jeter un coup d'oeil sur mes expression écrite JRB? Merci d'avance.

What did you learn about charity in Victorian England?

7. Charity in Victorian England was not really charity. This “good” people of a parish didn't really help orphans but took advantage of them. In exchange of food they had to work from morning till night without complaining.

And, if they didn't work enough they probably didn't feed them or, as it happened to Oliver, they get rid of them. We can imagine they didn't want to take of an orphan who asked for more food or complained about the hard work he had to do.

The real reasons behind charity in Victorian England was probably money. Children are manipulable and because they were orphan, they didn't really have the choice. Workhouses' owners could exploit children without impunity.

Expression écrite.

Would you say that our society is more tolerant than it used to be some one hundred years ago or would you say that there is still room for improvement. Discuss this taking as example the condition of women or the poor in our country.

Today, society is more tolerant than it used to be one hundred years ago but not everywhere in the world.

People from the west are tolerant country. One example is the freedom of religion. Today if you are adherent (croyant?) you can practice your religion freely. You can choose your husband or wife. Furthermore gay marriage is allowed or on the way in the west. In addition, women have the same rights as men, they can vote and birth control is more accessible.

All the same, discrimination is still present for women. Salary for women sometimes is lower whereas men receive more for the same job.

By the way, this bear no comparison with the condition of women in country that applies the Sharia in Middle-East.

Over there, women can be sentence to death by stoning(lapider?) for cheating her husband. Women are force to hide their face. Don't have access to education, contraception.

For this country there is still room for improvement, they have the same rules like in the Middle Ages.

But in the West freedom is threatened every day.

If we want to keep our society tolerant we have to fight against stupidity and prejudices(préjugés?).

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonsoir, si tu peux jeter un coup d'oeil sur mes expression écrite JRB? Merci d'avance.

What did you learn about charity in Victorian England?

7. Charity in Victorian England was not really charity. This These “good” people of a parish didn't really help orphans but took advantage of them. < this + singulier <---> these + pluriel - people est un nom pluriel In exchange of for food they had to work from morning till night without complaining.

And, if they didn't work enough they probably didn't feed them get any food or, as it happened to Oliver, they were rid of them. <Le pronom "they" ne doit pas être ambigu mais remplacer un seul et même nom employé précédemment, à savoir ici "orphans". We can imagine they "good" parishioners <voir note précédente didn't want to take of an orphan who asked for more food or complained about the hard work he had to do.

The real reasons behind charity in Victorian England was probably money. Children are manipulable can be easily manipulated and because they were orphans, they didn't really have had the no choice. Workhouses' owners could exploit children without impunity. <Efforce-toi de penser en anglais, relis-toi TOUJOURS et sois logique !

Expression écrite.

Would you say that our society is more tolerant than it used to be some one hundred years ago or would you say that there is still room for improvement? Discuss this taking as example the condition of women or the poor in our country.

Today, society is more tolerant than it used to be one hundred years ago but not everywhere in the world.

People from the western countries are tolerant. <Il faut être un peu logique, n'est-ce pas ! One example is the freedom of religion. Today if you are adherent (croyant?) a believer you can practise your religion freely. <N'as-tu donc aucun dictionnaire ? You can choose your husband or wife. Furthermore gay marriage is allowed or on the way in the west. In addition, women have the same rights as men, they can vote and birth control is more accessible.

All the same, discrimination is still present for women. Salary for women sometimes is lower whereas men get/receive more for the same job.

By the way, this bearS no comparison with the condition of women in countries that apply the Sharia in the Middle-East. < -s final au présent simple du verbe dont le sujet est singulier. Inversement, sujet pluriel = verbe sans -s final. "C'est élémentaire, mon cher Watson" !

Over there, women can be stoned to death/sentenced to death by stoning (lapider?) for cheating her on / being unfaithful to / their husbands. -L'adjectif possessif DOIT être accordé en genre et en nombre avec le POSSESSEUR.

- L'anglais met systématiquement au pluriel un même complément qui est commun à plusieurs sujets. C'est à mémoriser. Women are forced to hide their faces, they don't have access to education, contraception. <Serais-tu fâché avec la terminaison du participe passé des verbes en -e ?

For this these country countries <voir plus haut there is still room for improvement, they have the same rules like in the Middle Ages. antiquated/outdated/medieval rules.

But in the West freedom is threatened every day.

If we want to keep our society tolerant we have to fight against stupidity and prejudices (préjugés?).

[battou]

Merci, pour cette correction JRB . Juste pour cette phrase, Children can be easily manipulate(d) and because they were orphans, they really have no choice. Je veux la garder au present car c'est une généralité, certain enfants sont toujours manipulé pour etre exploiter de nos jours meme en france.

[Jean B]

La garder au présent est possible à la triple condition que tu conserves le participe passé manipulated puisque c'est une forme verbale passive, que tu supprimes la mention historique et que tu ajoutes un complément de temps actuel.

Ce qui pourrait donner par exemple :Nowadays some children can easily be manipulated and exploited even in France.

[battou]

Merci