Correction Pour Oral Du Bac

[jojo15320]

Bonjour, voila je passe le bac à la fin de l'année. Je dois parler de moi et ce que j'ai fait ansi que ce que j'aime pendant 5 minutes non stop. Pour le moement j'ai écrit ça ; est ce que quelqu'un pourrait me le corriger s'il vous plait :

"My name’s Victor Lalias, I am 18 years old. I’m live in Chamalières in from to Clermont - Ferrand. I have 1 brother 20 years old and 3 sisters, the first have 22 years old and the last two have 16 years old. I’m student in high school Simone Weil. During my training, I did internships in nursing homes and primary school. These courses helped me to discover these institutions.

Afterwards, I would become nurse because it’s very interesting job where you are in contact with lots of different people. More I like helps peoples and see them happy. I like too teamwork because everyone con give their opinion and it allows learning new things on residents or people who speaks.

With my high school, we set up a project in supporting a team who participated a 4L Trophy. This course aims to return to morocco of school supplies to help children to study. I and my friends have reaping school supplies and organized a Moroccan evening in the high school.

Before this evening, we prepared Moroccan pancakes with social center of Cap Blanc which is a side of the high school Jean Monnet.

My name’s Victor Lalias, I am 18 years old. I’m live in Chamalières in from to Clermont - Ferrand. I have 1 brother 20 years old and 3 sisters, the first have 22 years old and the last two have 16 years old. I’m student in high school Simone Weil. During my training, I did internships in nursing homes and primary school. These courses helped me to discover these institutions.

Afterwards, I would become nurse because it’s very interesting job where you are in contact with lots of different people. More I like helps peoples and see them happy. I like too teamwork because everyone con give their opinion and it allows learning new things on residents or people who speaks.

With my high school, we set up a project in supporting a team who participated a 4L Trophy. This course aims to return to morocco of school supplies to help children to study. I and my friends have reaping school supplies and organized a Moroccan evening in the high school.

Before this evening, we prepared Moroccan pancakes with social center which is a side of the high school.

Auriez - vous également des idées de quoi parler car avec ce texte là, cela me dure que 1 minutes 25 au lieu 5 minutes.

Si vous avez des suggestions, je suis preneur.

En vous remerciant par avance

[Starvol]

*Humpf humpf...*

Surtout, ne dis pas que tu n'as pas utilisé de traducteur automatique, parce que le résultat est assez effrayant!

1 minute 25? Je ne pense pas car les deux paragraphes sont les mêmes hormis le fait qu'il y ait une phrase de plus dans le second...