Correction Expression Écrite

[Berlyn]

Bonsoir,

J'aurais besoin de votre aide pour me corrigé ( si c'est possible ) les fautes de mon expression écrite ou du moin m'indiquer les pistes de correction. Merci d'avance :

1er :

Grandparents, by vertue of their age and experience have always enjoyed the most respectable status in our sociely. They have many roles in child life. In fact, their principal mission consern the education of the child. If they are rather old, they have many experiance in the life. Consequently, they knows many things not to do that teach to their children so as to children doesn't do that. So, often, grandparents are example. Moreover, they transmit their own experiance and many value as wisdom, politeness, respect for the laws, and family life.

Grandparents offers time and tenderness. They play with their child in order to not child be bored.

To conclued, I would say that my grandparents are very important for me. Every days, they teach me new things.

2eme :

Since several years, many children would have a total freedom. When we are child, it is difficult for us to make difference between good and bad things but somtimes parents do too much to control their children's behaviour so that we wonder if parents should give us total freedom not.

However, in my opinion, it's not a good things to several reason. If you give total freedom to a child, he could do many stupid things. In fact, a free child can began for example to fumar or to stop study.

Moreover, in the newspapers or televison, I waw that young people take drugs or even murder people. I think it's because young people are not able to control themselves.

For me, owing to parents which give total freedom to their child, many young are not on the good way.

To conclued, it's very dangerous for me to give total freedom to a child.

MERCI D'AVANCE !!

Berlyn

[Jean B]

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