Texte Pour Un Oral

[lauranna]

Bonjour, j'ai un oral bientot qui porte sur l'evolution de quelque chose et moi et mon amie nous avons decider de le faire sur nintendo. Donc j'aurais besoin d'une correction.

We are going to talk about the company Nintendo. This company was created in 1889 by Mr Yamauchi. We want to talk about it because Nintendo is famous in the entire world and everyone knows it. We are going to skip 80 years because during this time they just released game card it’s not very important. We are going to talk about their first electronical game, after about the game boy, then about the DS and finish with the Wii.

At the first Nintendo sold Japanese game card. It was in 1970 that the company began to manufacture electronic toys. They started with game that used a technology based on light sensors. This principle is mainly used on guns as Beam Gun Games which sold over a million units.

In 1980, it the first time that Nintendo decided to export to the United States. They import the radarscope, a quite popular game in Japan. It was a real success so Nintendo installs warehouse in Seattle to reduce travel time.

Now we are going to talk about the Gameboy.

In 1989, the first Gameboy is released. Nintendo equip it a screen average quality colorless to lower the selling price of the console. It was first released in Japan after Europe and then in the U.S. This version will be sold over 110 million copies. So it’s a big success.

Six years after, after sales of the game boy began to fall, the company diced to create a new one: the game boy pocket. It’s the same of the other but it’s smaller and the screen quality is better.

In 1998, Nintendo released two consoles: the game boy light but it wasn’t a good idea and after the game boy color.

And to finish with the game boy, there was in 2001 a new one: the game boy advance it is the most powerful handheld console at the moment. With the quality of games offered, it will sell 70 million.

Now we are going to present the Nintendo DS. It’s a handheld console with a double screen. The first model was release in 2004. It is a risk that the company took but ultimately was good to take. Indeed it is more than 155 million consoles that were sold worldwide. The first one was so big now no one buys it; it’s the Nintendo Dsi who is selling instead. The last model, it’s the Nintendo 3DS but it’s a little more expensive than the other model.

We finish with the Wii, a TV console released for the first time in 2006. We use a remote control to play. The console detects all the movement of the remote. A successor is released this year: the Wii U but this time it’s not a familial console just one player can use it.

But this console is concurrence by the Xbox developed by Microsoft and the play station by Sony.

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

We are going to talk about the Nintendo company. This company was created in 1889 by Mr Yamauchi. We want to talk about it because Nintendo is famous in the entire world and everyone knows it. We are going to skip 80 years because during this time they just released game cards, it’s not very important. First, we are going to talk about their first electronical game, after next about the game boy, then about the DS and finish with finally the Wii.

At the first Nintendo sold Japanese game cards. It was in 1970 that the company began to manufacture electronic toys. They started with games that used a technology based on light sensors. This principle is mainly used on guns as Beam Gun Games which sold over a million units.

In 1980, it was the first time that when Nintendo decided to export to the United States. They imported the radarscope, a quite popular game in Japan. It was a real success so Nintendo installed a warehouse in Seattle to reduce travel time. Attention à conserver le temps du récit =>> le prétérit.

Now we are going to talk about the Gameboy.

In 1989, the first Gameboy is was released. Nintendo equipped it with an average quality colorless screen to lower the selling price of the console.

- prétérit encore, il y a 24 ans tout de même !

- les adjectifs DEVANT le nom, crénom !

It was first released in Japan after later in Europe and then in the U.S. This version will be was sold over 110 million copies. So it’s it was a big success.

Six years after later, after the sales of the game boy began to fall, the company decided to create a new one: the pocket game boy. Dans un nom composé de 2 noms ou +, celui qui qualifie l'autre, et prend donc valeur d'adjectif, se place naturellement DEVANT. Ici, c'est pocket qui qualifie game boy, OK ? C'est à mémoriser. It’s the same of as the other but it’s smaller and the screen quality is better.

In 1998, Nintendo released two consoles: the light game boy <Idem but it wasn’t a good idea and after later the color game boy. <Idem

And to finish with the game boy, there was a new one in 2001: the advance game boy <Idem it is the most powerful handheld console at the moment. With the quality of games offered, it will sell 70 million.

Now we are going to present the Nintendo DS. It’s a handheld console with a double screen. The first model was released in 2004. It is a risk that the company took but was ultimately good to take worth taking. Indeed it is more than 155 million consoles that were sold worldwide. The first one was so big now that no one buys it now; it’s the Nintendo Dsi who which is selling instead. The last latest model it’s is the Nintendo 3DS but it’s a little more expensive than the other model.- il faut réviser aussi l'emploi des pronoms relatifs, ce ne sera pas superflu.

- latest = dernier sorti, dernier en date, après lequel il y en aura d'autres <---> last = dernier de tous, ultime, après lequel il n'y en aura plus. OK ?

- pas de double sujet en anglais, la reprise par le pronom sujet "it" est donc une faute et c'est à mémoriser également.

We finish with the Wii, a TV console released for the first time in 2006. We use a remote control to play. The console detects all the movements of the remote control. A successor is released this year: the Wii U but this time it’s not a familial family console, just one player can use it.

But this console is concurrence challenged by the Xbox developed by Microsoft and the play station by Sony. Ni l'une ni l'autre n'avez de dictionnaire ?

Merci d'avance

[lauranna]

Merci beaucoup