Salut:) Corriger Mon Devoir Svp , Urgent !

[enirisbel]

Salut:) corriger mon devoir svp

Énoncé :

Expression écrite

You have decided to enter a competition in which you have to present a new invention that you think would be useful to many people. Write a report dealing with the aspects suggested below. (200 words)

Vous avez décidé de participer à une compétition dans laquelle vous devrez présenter une nouvelle invention qui vous serait utile à beaucoup de gens. Écrire un rapport traitant des aspects proposée ci-dessous. (200 mots)

a) How the idea came to you.

Comment l'idée vous est venue.

b) What items already exist on the market and why they are not satisfactory.

les articles de chapeau existent déjà sur le marché et pourquoi ils ne sont pas satisfaisants.

c) Your invention: description, materials used, size, function, how it works etc...

Votre invention : la description, le matériel utilisé, la grandeur, la fonction, comment il travaille et cetera...

d) How it would improve things for people (advantages).

Comment il améliorerait les choses pour les gens (avantages).

e) In terms of cost, how expensive it could be to produce.

Du point de vue du prix, comment il pourrait devoir produire.

Pouriez vous corriger mon devoir svp elle se trouve dans la piece jointe je vous remercie d'avance

bisous <3

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JRB

Envoyé aujourd'hui, 14:18

coucou dsl je n'es pas arriver a introduire la piece jointe :/

voici mon expression ecrite :

Mon expression ecrite :

Ladies and gentlemen, it is an honor for me to be here with you today to present my new invention.

I realized that I often lost my remote control often I was and wasted my time to find that it, sometimes so that it sometimes made ​​me lose my an entire show or early its beginning. <actions passées, terminées, coupées du présent = preterit.

That's when I had the idea of ​​inventing a TV without a remote control, which would light up/illuminate when you hit clap the your hands and would change channels , it should when you snap your fingers. I have looked for information on whether this invention already existed but this article was is still unknown.

For this project I have designed/conceived/built a microphone that is built into the television to identify the clapping of hands and fingers. To find these components I made use of audio visual specialists. Ideally, within a few years, TV sets could be purchased already fitted with this equipment.

I guess that many readers would be happy with this invention. Who would never dream of lying on the couch and using only his their hands to operate the TV, by not having the hassle to find the remote control? <lorsque l'emploi de l'adjectif possessif masculin ou féminin de la 3e personne du singulier est arbitraire, les anglais ont pris l'habitude de le remplacer par celui de la 3e personne du pluriel, ce qui a l'avantage de s'appliquer indifféremment aux 2 sexes. Ça peut choquer grammaticalement mais c'est ainsi.

Of course, the price of this TV would be much higher. As for a normal TV is priced at $ 225, it would be acceptable to pay this new TV double.

pouriez vous me dire si il n'ya pas de faute svp ??

je vous remercie d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Il n'y a aucune pièce jointe...

[Jean B]

Réponse ajoutée dans le message que tu as posté hier soir à 20:36.

[enirisbel]

je vous remercie beaucoup !!!