Correction D'une Biographie Svp

[Anaïs0563]

Bonsoir, J'aimerais que vous me corrigiez ma biographie svp car je pense qu'il y a énormément de fautes. Merci d'avance!

NATALIE PORTMAN

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Child star was revealed by the movie Léon, Natalie Portman reached the consecration thanks to his

masterful interpretation in Black Swan. She is a fabulous actress with many of talend.

MINI-BIO

Girl of a doctor, Nathalie Portman is only three years old when she settles down in the United States with her family in Washington then in New York. At the age of eleven, she tries the modelling and joins in a casting agency. From there, she takes away a role in the movie "Leon", of Luc Besson. At the age of twelve she already becomes a child star. To protect her(its) private life, she takes the maiden name of her grandmother who is Portman. At the age of sixteen she has already played in six movies. In 1997, she(it) makes noticed has Broadway thanks to his(her,its) presentation(display) in the Newspaper of "Anne Franck". In 2010

she plays in Black Swan and the movie has a real success. She receives even one Golden Globe in 2011 for the best actress.

Tu ne veux faire aucun effort ? Moi non plus.

JRB

[Anaïs0563]

J'ai des difficultés, c'est pas en faisant comme ca que je vais m'améliorer!!

[Anaïs0563]

NATALIE PORTMAN

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Child star was revealed by the movie Léon, Natalie Portman reached the consecration thanks to her

masterful interpretation in Black Swan. She is a fabulous actress with many of talend.

MINI-BIO

daughter of a doctor, Nathalie Portman is only three years old when she settles down in the United States with her family in Washington then in New York. At the age of eleven, she tries the modelling and joins in a casting agency. From there, she won a role in the movie "Leon", of Luc Besson. At the age of twelve she already becomes a child star. To protect her private life, she takes the maiden name of her grandmother who is Portman. At the age of sixteen she has already played in six movies. In 1997, she has succes Broadway thanks to her presentation in the journal of "Anne Franck". In 2010

she plays in Black Swan and the movie has a real success. She receives even one Golden Globe in 2011 for best actress.

[Jean B]

J'ai des difficultés, c'est pas en faisant comme ca que je vais m'améliorer!!

[Anaïs0563]

ma correction est juste? Parce que je ne devait pas mettre sa date de naissance et son metier dans la mini biographie. car je dois le mettre au dessus sans rédiger.

C'est pour cela que je n'ai pas utiliser vos phrases.

[Jean B]

NATALIE PORTMAN

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As a child star Natalie Portman was revealed by the movie Léon. She reached apotheosis thanks to her

masterful interpretation in Black Swan. She is a fabulous talented actress with many of talend.

MINI-BIO

daughter of A doctor's daughter, Nathalie Portman is was only three years old when she settled down in the United States with her family in Washington then in New York. At the age of eleven, she tried the modelling and joined in a casting agency. From there, she won a role in the movie "Leon", of by Luc Besson. At the age of twelve she had already become a child star. To protect her private life, she took the maiden name of her grandmother which is Portman. At the age of sixteen she had already played in six movies. In 1997, she succeeded in Broadway thanks to her performance in the "Journal of Anne Franck". In 2010 she played in Black Swan and the movie had a real success. She even received one Golden Globe for best actress in 2011.

[Anaïs0563]

merci beaucoup!! J'avais complétement oublier de conjuguer au prétérit. J'y penserais pour la prochaine fois