Correction D'un Texte

[dreamthelife]

J'aimerais que l'on corrige mon texte car à mon avis il y a beaucoup de fautes mon niveau d'anglais est très faible. Merci d'avance.

During my holiday, I did baby-sitting. I kept two children’s, they are three old. They names are Chloé and Julie. I kept them during three days. Two days passed two very good, we played to games, they watched to cartoons. The last day where I kept them, it was the morning, they didn’t wake up. Suddenly I was occupying: I did dishes, I watched the TV. Chloé woke up before Maëlys but I wasn’t hearing. Chloé descended stairs and then I was hearing a big “BOUM “. I precipitated for see it was what: Chloé was falling in stairs, she was crying and thus woke up Julie. Chloé was hearting arm. I was panicking and I called their mom. Twelve minutes later, their mom was here. The mom went hospital; the arm of Chloé was breaking. Suddenly the mom of Chloé and Maëlys didn’t give moneys. I decided to stop the baby-sitting because it’s a lot of responsibility and I was having scare for Chloé.

[Starvol]

Bonjour.

Quelqu'un va devoir repasser derrière moi, mais voici une rapide correction.

J'aimerais que l'on corrige mon texte car à mon avis il y a beaucoup de fautes mon niveau d'anglais est très faible. Merci d'avance.

During my holidays, I did baby-sitting. I kept two children (pourquoi un 's? Attention: a child= two children), they are three years old (mettez soit years ou bien enlevez old mais ne mélangez pas les deux). Their (they= pronom personnel; their=pronom possessif) names are Chloé and Julie. I kept them during three days. The first two days went two (?) very well: we played games and watched cartoons. The last day I kept them, they didn’t woke up in the morning. Suddenly I was busy: I did dishes (ou: I did the washing-up en anglais britannique), I watched the TV. Chloé woke up before Maëlys (qui est Maëlys?) but I didn't hear her. Chloé came down the stairs and then I heard (action courte= prétérit) a big “BOUM “. I rushed toward her in order to see what it was: Chloé was fallen (p.passé) in the stairs. She was crying: so Julie woke up. Chloé was hurt her (heart veut dire coeur) arm. I panicked and I called their mom. Twelve minutes later, their mom was here. She went to the hospital; Chloé's arm was broken. After that, her mom and Maëlys refused to pay me. I decided to stop the baby-sitting because it’s a lot of responsibility and I was too scared for Chloé.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

J'aimerais que l'on corrige mon texte car à mon avis il y a beaucoup de fautes mon niveau d'anglais est très faible. Merci d'avance.

During my holiday, I did went baby-sitting / baby-sat. I kept looked after / took care of / two children’s, they are three years old. <children est le pluriel irrégulier de child. They Their names are Chloé and Julie. <Je ne parviens pas à comprendre pourquoi tu peux employer un pronom personnel sujet à la place d' un adjectif possessif. Les bras m'en tombent ! Est-ce qu'en français tu confonds aussi Leurs et Ils/Elles ? I kept minded them during three days. Two days passed two very good well, we played to games, they watched to cartoons. <N'as-tu aucun dictionnaire ? play et watch sont des verbes transitifs directs, ce qui veut dire qu'ils s'emploient SANS préposition. In the morning of the last day where I kept them, it was the morning, they didn’t wake up. Suddenly I was occupying: I did dishes busy washing up and watching TV. Chloé woke up before Maëlys<Allons bon, elle ne s'appelle plus Julie ? but I wasn’t hearing couldn't hear her. Chloé descended walked down the stairs and then I was hearing heard a big “BOUM bang “. I precipitated for rushed to see it was what it was: Chloé was falling had fallen in downstairs, she was crying and thus woke up Julie. <Tiens donc, elle s'appelle Julie à nouveau ? Tu ne te relis donc jamais ? Chloé was hearting had hurt her / had a pain in her / arm. I was panicking in a panic and I called their mom. Twelve minutes later, their mom was here. The mom went Chloé was taken to hospital; the her arm of Chloé was breaking broken. Suddenly Consequently the mom of Chloé and Maëlys didn’t give me any moneys. I decided to give up / stop the baby-sitting because it’s a lot of responsibility and I was having scare scared for Chloé.

[Starvol]

“BOUM bang “

Tiens il faudrait que j'apprenne les onomatopées aussi.

Voilà quelque chose qu'on ne nous a jamais appris en cours! ^^

Sont-elles toutes différentes du français ou bien y en a-t-il des identiques?

[Jean B]

“BOUM bang “

Tiens il faudrait que j'apprenne les onomatopées aussi.

Voilà quelque chose qu'on ne nous a jamais appris en cours! ^^

Sont-elles toutes différentes du français ou bien y en a-t-il des identiques?

[Starvol]

Merci! ^^

C'est toujours bien d'apprendre de nouvelles choses, aussi anecdotiques soient-elles...