Une Petite Correction

[alexandro martin]

Bonjour à tous. je doit écrire un journal intime sur le "the lost world" uniquement au passé . J'ai besoin d'une correction svp

17 februry 1912 :

Today it was the worst day of my life because, I quarelled with my fiancée , she doesn't want me to go in the south America . How can I accepted it? I waited this day from ten years . I was confused and sad .

I had to chose between my love and my life. I tried to convence her but in vain .

She explained me and told me that it was dangerous place . After thinking some hours I chose my life , I knew I wasn't a very handsome man but I had a happy go lucky approach to life. She broke up with me . I wasn't sure to pull of that expedition but I wanted to go and discover new things.

18 februry 1912 :

We arrived in the Amazon , we were tired so we decided to spend some hours near the Amazon river . Iwent to bring some water to Mr.Summerlee , I was filling my bottle when suddenly I heard some voices , which was approching to me . I hided myself and I saw some indigenous on a queer boat . They were hungry ,they came here to find something to eat . I was looking the native people when I saw a strange creature . I shouted I took flight and ran. I had two ennemies : first the horrible creature and second the hungry native who wanted to eat me . I was timorous when suddenly ,i saw professor Summerlee in front of me , by seeing mr summerlee the chilling people killed the weird creature and started dancing . I was shocked and speechless , I stared at them and tried to understand why they were dancing . " I know them , they are my friends" said professor summerlee out of the blue . He knew them because he had already came here. He explained me that the natives were happy by seeing professor again ; he had saved the live of their leader 2 years before . We went with natives in layor where they lived . We stayed 2 days but in these two days I started loving them . And made a loads of friends.

19 feb 1912 :

We saw atleast 5 animals half horse half monkey . They had three hands.they putted us in the cage except the leader of natives kokolo. They took a big rock and threw at the face of kokolo. It was an awful scene . I can't put up with bloods so I took my gun and shouted them one by one . I was petrified because I dared to kill someone or I should say something.

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Bonjour à tous. j

Je dois écrire un journal intime sur le "the lost world" uniquement au passé. J'ai besoin d'une correction S.V.P.

17 February 1912 :

Today it was the worst day of in my life because I quarelled with my fiancée, she doesidn't want me to go in the to South America. How can could I accepted it? I had waited been looking forward to this day from for ten years. I was confused and sad.

I had to chose between my love and my life. I tried to convince her but in vain.

She explained me and told me that it was a dangerous place. After thinking over it for some hours I chose my way of life. I knew I wasn't a very handsome man but I had a happy go lucky approach to life. She broke up with me. I wasn't sure to pull of I could get over that expedition but I wanted to go and discover new things.

18 February 1912 :

We arrived in the Amazonia, we were tired so we decided to spend some hours near the Amazon river. I went to bring Mr.Summerlee some water. I was filling my bottle when suddenly I heard some voices which was were coming up to / approaching / me. I hided myself and I saw some indigenous natives on a queer boat. They were hungry, they came here to find something to eat. I was looking at the native people them when I saw a strange creature. I shouted and ran away / took flight. I had two ennemies: first the horrible creature and second the hungry natives who wanted to eat me. I was timorous scared when suddenly I saw professor Summerlee in front of me. by On seeing Mr Summerlee the chilling people killed the weird creature and started dancing. I was shocked and speechless. I stared at them and tried to understand why they were dancing. " I know them, they are my friends" said professor Summerlee out of the blue. He knew them because he had already come here. He explained me that the natives were happy by seeing professor again ; he had saved the life of their leader 2 years before. We went with the natives in layor to the place where they lived. We stayed 2 days but in these two days I started loving them and made a loads of friends.

19 Feb. 1912 :

We saw at least 5 animals half horse half monkey. They had three hands. They putted us in the cage except the leader of the natives Kokolo. They took a big rock and threw it at the face of Kokolo. It was an awful scene. I can't put up with blood so I took my gun and shouted shot them one by one. I was petrified because I dared to kill someone or I should say something.

Merci d'avance

[alexandro martin]

Merci beaucoup pour cette correction .

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup pour cette correction .

[alexandro martin]

Je fais faire un effort je tiendrais compte de votre annotations la prochaine fois.