Pouvez Vous Corriger Mes Fautes

[emmaline6]

Goog morning BBC 50my names is Sonia AND I often listen the radio station

I leave you A voice message for your local radio expressing me feelig and me reactions about the role of celebrities int he media and the image they vehicule

I think honnorable action of lennon and yoko

it is true that i am fan of beatles but lennon for him he was the peace in the world

I find that splendid of the men so wonderful allowe the time engage in an overall communication strategy, designed to happiness the absence of war consequently the peace as jane fonda a advocated against the Vietnam War

on the other hand i find , the attitude of Prince Harry not appropriate because he represents. the British

the wore a nazi uniform at a fancy dress party is shocking The people killed on the battlefield belonged to all nationalities. And Some homosexuals, especially those who were Jewish, were killed by Nazis

Insulted his homeland is so stupid« granny i ve got to got,got to go send my love Corgis and grandpa

HE must to represent his homeland and not be as Édouard VIII who has

Without be kings he represents the monarchy

Danny Boyle is a great director LA PLAGE nevertheless i find what to leave the children from thier slum hovel and child star has been to live a plastic tarpaulin is is contemptuous for the Indian population

The shoot of the film in India him didn't cost too much.he could to increase the salary of de ces 2 stars du films

This is the businesse but Boyle has shown a lack of humanity

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Pour inciter les gens qui vont te lire à te prendre au sérieux et à bien vouloir te corriger, il serait bon :

- primo, que tu donnes l'énoncé de ton travail, pas que tu les forces à un jeu de devinettes

- deusio, que tu apprennes un minimum de grammaire de l'anglais et écrives tout normalement

- tertio, que tu mettes des majuscules partout où elles sont nécessaires, en particulier aux noms propres et au premier mot de chaque phrase

- quarto, que tu écrives correctement le pronom sujet 1ère personne singulier

- quinto, que tu mettes un point à chaque fin de phrase

- last but not least, au temps pour moi si je me trompe, que tu proposes un travail personnel, pas des bouts de phrases repiqués ça et là sur l'internet et mis plus ou moins bout à bout sans la moindre cohérence ni le moindre mot de liaison.

Si c'est le cas, alors sincèrement tu es à plaindre et je plains également ton professeur.

Mais, si ce n'est pas le cas, j'espère que tu ne te formaliseras pas de tout ce qui précède et sauras en tenir compte pour revenir poster un travail personnel digne du nom, auquel cas je te corrigerai volontiers.

[emmaline6]

Je devais réagir et exprimer mes sentiments face à Lennon(une photographie),l'attitude du Prince Harry,et l'attitude de Danny Boyle par rapport à ses acteurs sous payer ayant jouer dans le film Slumdog Millionaires.

Je vous demande de l'aide pour corriger mes fautes,merci.

Goog morning BBC 50my names is Sonia and I often listen the radio station.

I leave you a voice message for your local radio expressing me feelig and me reactions about the role of celebrities int he media and the image they vehicule.

I think honnorable action of lennon and yoko (l'action honnorable de )

It is true that i am fan of beatles but lennon for him he was the peace in the world.

I find that splendid of the men so wonderful allowe the time engaglee in an overall communication strategy, designed to happiness the absence of war consequently the peace as jane fonda a advocated against the Vietnam War

On the other hand I find , the attitude of Prince Harry not appropriate because he represents the British.

The wore a nazi uniform at a fancy dress party is shocking. The people killed on the battlefield belonged to all nationalities. And Some homosexuals, especially those who were Jewish, were killed by Nazis

Insulted his homeland is so stupid« granny i ve got to got,got to go send my love Corgis and grandpa

HE must to represent his homeland and not be as(ou like) who has (abondonner son trone et ses devoirs)

Without be kings he represents the monarchy.

Danny Boyle is a great director LA PLAGE nevertheless .I find what to leave the children from thier slum hovel and child star has been to live a plastic tarpaulin is is contemptuous for the Indian population.

The shoot of the film in India him didn't cost too much.he could to increase the salary of de ces 2

two stars of movie

This is the businesse but Boyle has shown a lack of humanity.

[Jean B]

Goog morning BBC 50. My names is Sonia and I often listen to the radio station.

I leave you a voice message for your local radio expressing me my feelings and me reactions about the role of celebrities in the media and the image they vehicule convey.

I think honourable action of Lennon and Yoko (l'action honorable de )<Ça ne signifie rien.

It is true that i I am a fan of the Beatles but Lennon, as for him, he was the wanted peace in the world.

I find that think it is splendid of the from so wonderful men people allowe the to spend time and engaglee in commit themselves to an overall communication strategy, designed to happiness and the absence of war. Nouvelle phrase> Consequently the peace is their ultimate pursuit as Jane Fonda a advocated militated against the Vietnam War.<Elle militait contre la guerre du Vietnam, elle n'en défendait pas la cause !

On the other hand I find , think the attitude of Prince Harry is not appropriate because he represents the British.

The wore Wearing a nazi uniform at a fancy dress party is shocking. The people killed on the battlefields belonged to all nationalities. And some homosexuals, especially those who were Jewish, were killed by Nazis.

Insulted Insulting his homeland is so stupid "granny I' ve got to go, got to go send my love to the corgis and grandpa."<??? Qu'est-ce que cela vient faire là ?

He must to represent his homeland and not be as (ou like) behave like the one who has renounced his throne and duties. (abondonner son trone et ses devoirs)<Il y a fort peu de chances qu'il devienne roi un jour, mais bon...

Without being a king he represents the monarchy.

Danny Boyle is a great director who made LA PLAGE. Nouvelle phrase> Nevertheless, I find think what that to leave the showing <??? children from in their slum hovels and a star child has been to who live under a plastic tarpaulins is is contemptuous for of the Indian population.<Malgré mes efforts, je ne suis pas parvenu à comprendre ce que tu as bien pu vouloir dire. Dieu sait pourtant que j'ai une longue expérience derrière moi.

The shooting of the film in India didn't cost him too much. He could to increase the salary of de ces these 2 two movie stars. of movie

This is the businesse but Boyle has shown a lack of humanity.

[emmaline6]

Je te remercie, j'ai en effet beaucou de lacune , ce week end je revois toutes les bases que j'ai apprises et oublier. De plus je n'ai pas fait ma seconde en raison d'une phobie scolaire. Merci sincérment.