Correction Formal Letter

[lauraprincesse]

Bonjour,

Cest une formal letter pourriez vous maider a la corriger svp

Dear Ms Spiller,

Thank you very much for your letter informing me that I have won first prize in the competition. I am looking forward to going to Australia and attending the course.

First of all, I would like to do the course in August because in September I have to work for my father, in Spain, he is building a guesthouse. It had always been his dream!

Secondly, in the morning, I would like to join a grammar and vocabulary course because I want to improve my oral expression to could speak with people all over the world. The grammar has always been my greatest difficulty. In fact, I have many gaps of mere notions.

Please could you tell me what type of accommodation is provided and what kind of clothes I should bring with me?

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Laura

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Dear Ms Spiller,

Thank you very much for your letter informing me that I have won the first prize in the competition. I am looking forward to going to Australia and attending the course.<Puisque c'est le premier, il est déterminé.

First of all, I would like to do follow the course in August because I have to work for my father in Spain in September.<La conjonction because introduit la proposition subordonnée. En conséquence, les compléments de lieu et de temps se placent après. He is building a guest house. It had has always been his dream! <Pourquoi ce past perfect ? Au contraire, le present perfect réalise le lien passé-présent.

Secondly, in the morning, I would like to join a grammar and vocabulary course because I want to improve my oral expression to could so that I can speak with people all over the world. <Hou la vilaine horreur ! Un modal n'a pas de base verbale. The Grammar has always been my greatest difficulty. <Omission de the devant un nom employé dans la généralité. C'est à mémoriser. In fact, I have many gaps of in mere simple notions.

Please could you tell me what type of accommodation is provided and what kind of clothes I should bring with me?

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Laura