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[clochette94]

bonjour, j'ai un dossier à faire sur l'entreprise Shell et je voulais savoir si y avait des fautes dans mon introduction. je vous en remerci d'avance

Shell is a multinational oil and gas company headquartered in The Hague, Netherlands and with its registered office in London. The Shell brand is one of the most familiar commercial symbols in the world. Royal Dutch Shell is the world’s largest private sector oil company by revenue, Europe’s largest energy group and a major player in the petrochemical industry. One of North America’s leading producers of oil, gas and petrochemicals. Shell Oil Company has distinguished itself by its commitment to industry innovation. Its marketing expertise has enabled the company to compensate for its relatively low volume of crude oil production, as compared to its strongest competitors, by selling an equivalent among of gasoline nationwide.

Shell has a primary listing on the London Stock Exchange and is a constituent of the FTSE 100 Index. As of 6 July 2012, it was the largest company on the FTSE, with a market capitalization of £140.9 billion.

Shell aims to lead effectively, responsibly and profitably operate in the sectors of oil, petroleum products, gas, chemicals and other sectors.

In addition, Shell continues aim to participate in the research and development of alternative energy sources to meet the evolving needs of our customers and the growing global demand for energy.

I have chosen this company, because this is one of the best oil companies. But also, by this strategic and environment innovation. And I have also worked last summer in this company and I also wanted to explore Shell’s company.

[clochette94]

y a personne ?

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Pour l'amour du ciel, évite de relancer une heure à peine après avoir posté ta demande. Il ne faudrait quand même pas exagérer avec le bénévolat !

Aucun internaute ici, moi y compris, ne passe 24h/24 devant l'écran de l'ordinateur.

Tiens-le toi pour dit.

Shell is a multinational oil and gas company headquartered in The Hague, the Netherlands and with it has its registered office in London. The Shell brand is one of the most familiar commercial symbols in the world. Royal Dutch Shell is the world’s largest private sector oil company by revenue, Europe’s largest energy group and a major player in the petrochemical industry. One of North America’s leading producers of oil, gas and petrochemicals. Shell Oil Company has distinguished itself by its commitment to industry innovation. Its marketing expertise has enabled the company to compensate for its relatively low volume of crude oil production, as compared to its strongest competitors, by selling an equivalent among amount of gasoline nationwide.<Je suppose.

Shell has a primary listing on the London Stock Exchange and is a constituent of the FTSE 100 Index. As of 6 July 2012, it was the largest company on the FTSE, with a market capitalization of £140.9 billion.

Shell aims to lead effectively, responsibly and profitably operate in the sectors of oil, petroleum products, gas, chemicals and other sectors.

In addition, Shell continues aim to participate in the research and development of alternative energy sources to meet the evolving needs of our its customers and the growing global demand for energy.<L'utilisation de l'adjectif possessif our impliquerait soit que tu as repiqué ce texte sur le site de la Shell, ce que je veux pas croire, soit que tu ferais partie du personnel de cette société, ce que je crois également peu probable.

I have chosen this company, because this is one of the best oil companies and also for its strategic and environment innovation. And Moreover, I have also worked in this company last summer and I also wanted to explore Shell’s company too.<- Ton stage de l'été dernier est terminé, passé, daté =>> prétérit.

- Attention à l'emploi abusif du gérondif qui n'a aucune raison d'être ici et qui est grammaticalement impossible.

- Fais un effort sur l'emploi des link words et, autant que faire se peut, évite les répétitions.

Bonne continuation.