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[clochette94]

Bonsoir , je fais encore des erreurs, pouvez vous me dire s'il y en a encore ? merci d'avance

The product that I will promote is fashion jewellery for little girls. This brand new product is called "little fairy".

and who there are different collection and thema as love, friendship... A collection that includes the ring, necklace, hair accessories...Which encourage the little girl to buy the whole collection.

I target the segment of girl between 6 and 15 years old. I made a marketing survey, for this product, and 90% for the girls, this product is the ideal present for her. I think it can to be a bargain of the year .

we can promote on media advertising every morning and in end afternoon. When the children back to the school. And I can focus the famous actriz Selena Gomez in the advert.

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

The product (that) I will promote is fashion jewellery for little girls. This brand new product is called "little fairy"

and who there are it is available in different various collections and themes such as love, friendship... A collection that includes the ring, necklace, hair accessories, which encourages the little girl to buy the whole collection. Attention au -s final au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est singulier. Il faut le mettre à tous les verbes. Relis-toi !

I target the market segment of girls between 6 and 15 years old. I made a marketing survey for of this product and 90% for the girls, realized that, to 90% of girls polled, this product is the ideal present for her them. I think it can to be a the bargain of the year. L'adjectif possessif DOIT être accordé en genre et en nombre avec le possesseur auquel il se rapporte. Mémorise cette règle.

- Un modal DOIT toujours être suivi d'une Base Verbale, c'est une règle absolue à appliquer constamment.

We can promote on media advertising every morning and end in the late afternoon when the children are back to the from school. - Pas the devant un nom employé dans la généralité. Mémorise-le aussi, c'est très important.

- Retiens également que school s'emploie SANS the dans les expressions comme go to school/come back from school.

And I can focus on the famous actress Selena Gomez in the advert. Par hasard, ne serais-tu pas LV1 espagnol ?

[clochette94]

Merci beaucoup, pour votre aide ! Non je suis en LV1 Allemand... Et j'ai du mal avec l'anglais..:s