correction lettre svp

[kagura]

J'aimerais une correction svp. Merci d'avance.

sujet: écrire à votre superheros en le remerciant de vous avoir sauvé de "Sandy".

New York,.....

Dear Aquaman, my superhero,

In the last event you saved the population and I must than you.

I am the least old of the three children and I known many of your achievement.

I admire you, I admire your costume (it's the coolest) and I admire your superpowers.

Your are the best of the superhero.

You prevent the city from flooding.

If the are an other disaster I went you to intervene because your are more speed than other hero.

Other heros are the least capable to controle the water.

I think you don't remember me when you dive to save me.

With you there are less casualties than if an other person would have intervened.

I like your personality because you are the most shy and the most courageous person that I known.

I admire when you keep your head and help the wounded.

Your charity raised me awarness of superhero dedicate your life to help people.

For me you are as qualified as the president for lead the USA.

Please can I meet you?

Maybe you are less famous than Superman and Batman but you are better than them.

You should be more visible for the population.

You are the example that people mustn't break the law and we shouldn't take justice into they own hands.

And you should have stayed longer for we can thank you.

But I think you have less time than me and maybe you can't answer me.

I could tell you don't have to answer but is not possible because I dream my hero answer me!

Finally I am grateful to you .

See you soon and thank you Aquaman!

[Jean B]

kagura

Posté 28 novembre 2012 - 21:11

J'aimerais une correction SVP. Merci d'avance.

Sujet: écrire à votre superhéros en le remerciant de vous avoir sauvé de "Sandy".

New York,.....

Dear Aquaman, my superhero,

In During the last latest event you saved the population and I must thank you.

I am the least old younger one of the three children and I known many of your achievements.

I admire you, I admire your costume (it's the coolest one) and I admire your superpowers.

Your are the best of the superheros.

You prevented the city from flooding / being flooded.

If there are is another disaster I want you to intervene because your are more speed quicker / faster than any other hero.

Other heros are the least capable quite unable to controle the water.

I think you don't remember me when you dived to save my life / me.

With you there are less Casualties are much fewer than if another person would have had intervened.

I like your personality because you are the most shy shyest and the most courageous person that I known.

I admire when you keep your head<??? and help the wounded.

Your kindness / charity raised me awarness made me aware of a superhero who dedicates your his life to help people.

For me you are as qualified as the president for to lead the USA.

Please can I meet you?

Maybe you are less famous than Superman and Batman but you are better than them.

You should be more visible for/ make yourself more conspicuous to the population.

You are the example that people mustn't break the law and we shouldn't take justice into they their own hands.

And you should have stayed longer for so that we can thank could have thanked you.

But I think you have less time than me and maybe you can't answer me.

I could tell write you don't have to answer but it is impossible / not possible because I dream that my hero answers me!

Finally I am grateful to you.

See you soon and thank you Aquaman!

Le fond est certes plein d’enthousiasme juvénile et c’est respectable mais la forme est catastrophique car tu commets la plupart des fautes à ne pas commettre.

En voici la liste chronologique :

- last = dernier de tous / ultime ß-à latest = dernier en date

- younger one = le plus jeune d’un groupe donné. Tu remarques que dans ce cas, l’anglais n’emploie pas le superlatif de l’adjectif, mais le comparatif. C’est à mémoriser.

- There is + nom singulier ß-à there are + nom pluriel

- comparatif de supériorité d’un adjectif court = adjectif + -er.

- superlatif de supériorité d’un adjectif court = adjectif + -est.

- l’adjectif possessif s’accorde en genre et en nombre avec le possesseur auquel il se rattache.

- le but : pour/afin de + infinitif = to / in order to + Base Verbale (infinitif sans to) ; c’est une règle élémentaire qu’il faut appliquer de façon réflexe. JAMAIS for + V pour exprimer le but, JAMAIS. Mémorise-le une bonne fois.

-s final au présent simple d’un verbe dont le sujet est au singulier. Tu l’as appris en Sixième et c’est toujours valable aujourd’hui.

Conseil : fais maintenant toutes les révisions qui s’imposent car demain il sera trop tard.

Bonne continuation.