Correction du texte

[dreamthelife]

En Anglais on doit faire un texte de nos vacances d'été avec 100 mots au prétérit, je pense que dans mon texte il y a vraiment beaucoup, beaucoup d'erreurs parce que je ne suis pas très forte en Anglais, j'aimerais beaucoup qu'on me le corrige merci d'avance.

This summer, I bought a camera with the monies I had in my birthday. With my mother we decided to watch in " le bon coin " because in store it cost a lot of money. I got almost unused and i could to take a lot of photos. My best friend came in my home for one week. We woke up and we went to bed later. We went in the swimming-pool, we went in the cinema, the afternoon we went out in city. The evening we watched the horror movie. We spent our time to laugh. It was great on week. Then i went in spain, I was in a camping. The road was long. I spent my days in the swimming-pool. When we went in the overboard that was to side of camping. My stepfather jumped rocks and me too. My mother didn't want because she had afraid. One evening, we walked at the seaside, my family and me we were swim. In France the water froze but not in Spain. During this week, one day where it didn't do hot, we decided to go the parc port aventura there had a lot of fairground rides. The morning happened so fast, we ate at three o'clock. There had a tower of hundred meter and there had a ride with a huge descent. There had after a lot of people. There had a waiting thread so we wanted to do a ride. The parc closed at midnight and before with my mother we watched the heaven and we saw a falling star. I didn't have the times to do a wish and before returning at the camping, we ate a hot dog it was good. Then we returned at the camping where we spent our evening we would at market but it was hot. Before returning we stopped in home in friends where we ate. It rained and there had a storm impressive. The lightning fell not far of where we were because we had afraid. Then when I came back in France we celebrated birthday of my brother with all my family. It was a great evening. I could to see again all my friends. With my mother we went a day to Rennes where we ate macdo then the afternoon we did the shppping. During the holiday, I remade my bedroom, i painted walls in black and white, i bought fournitures, I changed the luster, i spent two or three days with my brother in my grandmamma, the afternoon i kept my cousin. Then i spent one week in my father, we played at bingo it was tiresome. After this week, i would to run the evening with my mother and my brother followed us in bike.Days that remained i got boned, i would in internet, i saw my friends, i want to the city but i didn't do things exeptional, and for do to pleasure at my mother i cleaned my home and i did the kitchen with my grandmamma i went to the Paris from a friend of her. I went to Paris in the train. There had a little late. I stayed on week, we did the store, we visited the Louvre museum and we saw the tour eiffel. On night we were to eat in a boat fly with my cousin, we saw the black eyed peas. There had a lot of people. It was the crowd. Then I went, four days before school as i do handball, we had a traineeship to do, where you had to do a lot of qport, we ate in a hostel. It was physical. During this Traineship, I twistes the ankle, i had to go to do a radio but finally i had nothing at whatever hours i was better

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Ton texte est littéralement truffé de fautes de toutes sortes, la plupart sur des notions de base, et honnêtement je ne me vois pas y passer du temps à les corriger car cela reviendrait à tout récrire ou presque.

En conséquence, je vais juste te les signaler en rouge, ce qui devrait t'amener à réfléchir pour les corriger toi-même, si tu le peux et si tu le veux.

Bon courage !

This summer, I bought a camera with the monies I had in my birthday. With my mother we decided to watch in " le bon coin " because in store it cost a lot of money. I got xx almost unused and i could to take a lot of photos. My best friend came in my home for one week. We woke up and we went to bed later. We went in the swimming-pool, we went in the cinema, the afternoon we went out in xx city. The evening we watched the horror movie. We spent our time to laugh. It was great on week. Then i went in spain, I was in a camping xx. The road was long. I spent my days in the swimming-pool. When we went in the overboard that was to side of xx camping xx. My stepfather jumped xx rocks and me too. My mother didn't want because she had afraid. One evening, we walked at the seaside, my family and me we were swim. In France the water froze but not in Spain. During this week, one day where it didn't do hot, we decided to go xx the parc port aventura there had a lot of fairground rides. The morning happened so fast, we ate at three o'clock. There had a tower of hundred meter and there had a ride with a huge descent. There had after a lot of people. There had a waiting thread so we wanted to do a ride. The parc closed at midnight and before with my mother we watched the heaven and we saw a falling star. I didn't have the times to do a wish and before returning at the camping xx, we ate a hot dog it was good. Then we returned at the camping xx where we spent our evening we would xx at xx market but it was hot. Before returning we stopped in home in friends where we ate. It rained and there had a storm impressive. The lightning fell not far of where we were because we had afraid. Then when I came back in France we celebrated xx birthday of my brother with all my family. It was a great evening. I could to see all my friends again. With my mother we went a day to Rennes where we ate macdo then the afternoon we did the shppping. During the holiday, I remade my bedroom, i painted xx walls in black and white, i bought fournitures, I changed the luster, i spent two or three days with my brother in my grandmamma xx, the afternoon i kept my cousin. Then i spent one week in my father xx, we played at bingo it was tiresome. After this week, i would xx to run the evening with my mother and my brother followed us in bike.Days that remained i got boned, i would xx in internet, i saw my friends, i want to xx the city but i didn't do things exeptional, and for do to pleasure at my mother i cleaned my home and i did the kitchen with my grandmamma i went to the Paris from a friend of her. I went to Paris in the train. There had a little late. I stayed on week, we did the store, we visited the Louvre museum and we saw the tour eiffel. On night we were to eat in a boat fly with my cousin, we saw the black eyed peas. There had a lot of people. It was the crowd. Then I went, four days before school as i do handball, we had a traineeship to do, where you had to do a lot of qport, we ate in a hostel. It was physical. During this Traineship, I twistes the ankle, i had to go to do a radio but finally i had nothing xx at whatever hours i was better