Rédaction en anglais à corriger ou modifier (niveau 4ème)

[sheila785]

Bonjour tout le monde !

Alors j'ai une rédaction à faire en anglais à propos d'une histoire sur halloween.

Je vous l'écris (en sachant qu'il y aura des fautes....) :

When Gaby glided over a huge puddle... a puddle of blood ! She was covered with blood. We howlod during one minute. After, we cleared Gaby.

Katy offered to eat, sleep and think. But Alwena and me (Gaby didn't talk, she was shoked) didn't want to sleep in this house, it was too worrying... So, weate and then we started to look for see if there was somethinf explained the blood.

Gaby was sure it was a vampire. But Alwena, Katy and me didn't thinf it was possible.

We finded nothing. So, we were fed up and we sleeped all night. The morning, we woke up and think about the evening before. When we saw that Gaby wasn't with we. We called her, but no sentences... We left and search her, we finded nothing. Alwena was saying : 'Gaby is dead, and we are going to die too !" when a strange people killed her. He killed Katy and he said to me : "Goodbye ! Have good dreams !". He tryed to kill me with a gun.

I am dying... Sorry, I can't say something very important...

Extract to the file of the investigation n°46, no resolute.

Voilà c'est fini ! Je précise que l'histoire est bizarre car le début, c'est le prof qui nous l'a donné...

Cette histoire est un peu gore, je l'avoue xD

Si vous trouvez des fautes, faites le moi savoir please !

J'espère qu'il y aura des réponses, car ce devoir est pour lundi prochain !

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

When Gaby glided slipped over on a huge puddle... a puddle of blood, she was covered with blood. We howled during one minute. Afterwards, we cleared Gaby.

Katy offered to eat, sleep and think. But Alwena and me I (*) (Gaby didn't talk, she was shocked) didn't want to sleep in this house, it was too worrying... So, we ate / had something to eat / and then we started to look for see if there was something explaining the blood.

Gaby was sure it was a vampire. But Alwena, Katy and me I didn't think it was possible.

We finded found nothing. So, we were fed up and we sleeped all night. In the morning, we woke up and think thought about the evening before. When we saw that Gaby wasn't with we us. We called her, but there was no sentences answer... We left to search for her, we findedfound nothing. Alwena was saying said: 'Gaby is dead, and we are going to die too !" when a strange people person killed her, he also killed Katy and (he) said to told me : "Good bye ! (Have) good sweet dreams!". He tried to kill me with a gun.

I am dying... Sorry, I can't say someanything very important...

Extract to the file of the from investigation file n°46, no resolute unsolved

[sheila785]

Merci ! Oui je vois que j'ai de quoi faire... On me dit souvent que ça part d'une bonne idée, mais qu'il faut réviser sa grammaire... Mais, disons que j'ai un peu de mal a m'y coller