Correction rédaction anglais

[Pauline_13]

Bonjour,

J'avais une rédaction à faire sur Twitter concernant mon avis. Cependant j'aimerais avoir de l'aide pour corriger mes fautes. Merci d'avance. Je vous met à la suite ma rédaction.

Cordialement.

Before registering and using Twitter, I have hesitated to create an account. Even if it fits in a course I do not necessarily normal to force us to create an account on a site where we don’t want one even if it is subsequently possible to the erase completely. For me, Twitter was a social network whose goal was not interested at all. But I finally resolved to create an account for the English course and only for English classes.

After my registration, I have a little "surfing" on the site to see what it was really. And I must admit that not everything is clear even in the departure information. Although it is advantageous to be able to track individuals, associations, radios ... we want it also has a disadvantage because everyone can see what we publish. Also, as everyone didn’t follow what was requested and has not created an account or decide to follow the account of our TD I think the year was losing its interest. However, Twitter can be a good way to interact with many people on issues that connect us with the interest that we carry them.

But I do not think I would keep my twitter account, because for me it has no interest in Twitter our lives, I do not see why people would be interested in the fact that we ate a fruit or not at noon.

So to conclude, for me Twitter has no interest and if I want to discuss the subject with people I did not need the internet to do so. I also think that Twitter, like all social networks does not promote social relations but rather the brakes. So I would delete my account from our next course unless it is necessary to keep some time but only for academic reasons.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Before registering and using Twitter, I have hesitated to create an account. Even if it fits in a course I do not think it's necessarily normal to force us to create an account on a site where we don’t want one even if it is subsequently possible to the erase it completely. For me, Twitter was is a social network whose goal was is not interested interesting at all. But I finally resolved to create an account for the English course and only for English classes.

After my registration, I have a little "surfing" on surfed the site a little to see what it was is really like. And I must admit that not everything is clear even in on the departure homepage information. Although it is advantageous to be able to track individuals, associations, radios ... we want, it also has a disadvantage because everyone can see what we publish. Also, as everyone didhasn’t followed what was is requested and has not created an account or decided to follow the account of our TD, I think the year was is losing its interest. However, Twitter can be a good way to interact with many people who share a similar interest on such-and-such issues. that connect us with the interest that we carry them. <Les calques du français sont à éviter comme la peste !

But I do not think I would will keep my Twitter account because for me it has no interest. in Twitter our lives, I do not see why people would be interested in the fact that we ate a fruit or not at noon.<Tout ça pue la traduction du français à plein nez et, pire encore, le traducteur en ligne. Avertissement sans frais.

So to conclude, for me Twitter has no interest and if I want to discuss the subject with people I did do not need the internet to do so. I also think that Twitter, like all social networks, does not promote social relations but rather the brakes put a brake on them. <Usage confirmé de traducteur automatique. So I would will delete my account from our next course unless it is necessary to keep it some time but only for academic reasons.