Description d'image

[amylee68]

Bonjour,je dois envoyer un fichier audio a mon prof pour mercredi, c'est une description/analyse d'image, c'est très long (j'en suis désolée) mais sa doit tenir 3 à 4 minutes. Mon niveau est assez mauvais et je pense qu'il y a beaucoup de fautes, si quelqu'un peut m'aider à corriger (au moins les plus graves). J'ai posté mon texte sur un autre forum et une personne a dit j'ai fais copier-coller dans un traducteur et n'a pas voulu m'aider, je vous assure que non, mais je me suis servie de reverso pour des mots seuls et du dictionnaire pour les mots a plusieurs sens. Evitez donc de me juger j'ai mis plus d'une heure à le traduire.. Merci d'avance a ceux qui voudront bien m'aider

Voila mon texte :

The first illegal immigrants

1. Introduire (nature, localisation)

This document is a caricature called « the first illégal immigrants ». It has probably be draw has our time, but the situation was in the 17th century. We can find this picture in the press or in internet, the autor is Singer.

2. Décrire

We can see a action of the History be caricatured. In the 17th century, the poeple of Plymouth in england, run away the religious persectutions in Europe. With a sailboat name is the Mayflower, there emigrate in america to create the new Jerusalem. We call them Pilgrims. The present scenes on this caricature we show their arival on a beach of america, their is opposite with native americans.

On the left of the picture, they is a pilgrims family : the father, the mother and the child. Their get off the little boat, witch as them led since the boat up to the beach. The boat is a big sailboat, it is situated in the top left-hand corner in the middle ground on the sea. The english do not look richs, their clothes are simple for this period : the men has a black hat, a white shirt, the gloves, a simple trouser and big shoes. He has still a foot in the little boat and he hold a paddle. The women has a hood on the head, a simple dress, an apron, she don't have jewels. She hold her boy in front of her. The boy is so dressed simply. They don't have arms and they look in peace. The family is draw with big eyes, they look surprised.

Of the right of the picture, there is mens. They are tree natifs americans, they are alike. Contrary in english, they are littles dressed : they clothes consist of loincloths, of slippers, there are bare-chested. There have not verry hair but there are combed of feathers and there have jewel : the arring maybe golden. Contrary in english, there are arrms, the man whitch is in front of had a hax in the left hand, the man whitch is behing the first man had a bow with arrow so in the left hand, the third man has nothing. The tree mens don't look happy. We can say nothing on the colors because the caricature is in black and white.

3. Analyser

The pilgrims and the native americains are face to face, a native americain speak thank to a balloon of comic strip. He says « No green cards ? No visas ? I'm sorry... but we need to see some identification ». The native americains don't want that the english come in america because there are not identifiable and there don't have the papers that they want. There are considered as illegals immigrants, and for this period, there are the first. The situation is funny because what says the native americain is totally unexpected and the means of identification are of our period, there don't are of the 17th century. It does not correspond with the true history, indeed the natives americains greeted the english without problem. Nevertheless the caricature that represent a other periode. The author denonce maybe a certain situations of today, for exemple, the situation between the usa and the mexique. The author maybe want don't choqued. Today the usa restrict the immigration, and particulary the mexican immigration. That's what, the usa demand lot of paper and conditions to come in this country. The border close.

4. Mon avis

I like this caricature but they is not color, i think that it's pity. The amazed head of the english is funny. I like the subtlety of this picture : how represent a situation of today with a other periode and how the author show that the native americains are ridiculous.

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

The first illegal immigrants

1. Introduire (nature, localisation)

This document is a caricature called « the first illégal immigrants ». It has probably been drawn has our time<Bien que tu protestes du contraire, ceci est un exemple typique, pour ne pas dire grotesque, d'une production d'un traducteur automatique quelconque et il y en a d'autres, hélas pour toi, hélas pour moi ! nowadays, but the situation was events it relates happened in the 17th century. We can find this picture in the press or on the Internet, the author is Singer.

2. Décrire

We can see that a action of the History historical fact be was caricatured. In the 17th century, the people of from Plymouth in England run away the fled from religious persectutions in Europe. With On board a sailboat named is the Mayflower, there they emigrated in to America to create the new Jerusalem. We call them Pilgrims. The present scenes on this caricature we show their arival on a beach of America their is opposite with where they met native Americans.

On the left of the picture, they there is a pilgrim family: the father, the mother and the child. Their They have just got off the little boat witch which as has led them since from the boat up to the beach. The boat is a big sailboat, it is situated in the top left-hand corner in the middle ground on the sea. The English do not look richs, their clothes are simple for this period: the man has is wearing a black hat, a white shirt, the gloves, a simple trousers and big shoes. He still has a foot in the little boat and he is holding a paddle. The woman has is wearing a hood on the her head, a simple dress, an apron, she don't doesn't have wear jewels. She is holding her boy in front of her. The boy is so dressed simply too. They don't have arms and they look in peace peaceful. The family is drawn with big eyes, they look surprised.

Of the right of the picture, there is are mens men. They are three natifs native Americans, they are alike. Contrary in Unlike the English people, they are littles dressed wearing few clothes: they clothes which consist of loincloths of and slippers moccasins, there they are bare-chested. There They have not verry much hair but there it are is combed of with feathers and there they have are wearing jewels the arring possibly golden earrings maybe golden. Contrary in Unlike the English people, there are arrms they are carrying arms; the man whitch who is in front of the foreground had is holding an hax axe in the his left hand, the man whitch who is behind the first man him had is carrying a bow with arrows so in the his left hand too, the third man has nothing. The tree three mens men don't look happy. We can say nothing on the colors because the caricature is in black and white. <Et, pour couronner le tout, voilà une belle lapalissade !

3. Analyser

The pilgrims and the native Americans are face to face, a native American is speaking thanks to a comic strip balloon. He says « No green cards? No visas? I'm sorry... but we need to see some identification ». The native Americans don't want that the English to come in to America because there the latter are not identifiable can't be indentified and there don't have the necessary papers that they want. There They are considered as illegals immigrants, and for considering the period, there they are the first ones. The situation is funny because what says the native American says is totally unexpected and the means of identification are of belong to our period, there don't are of not to the 17th century. It does not correspond with to the true history, indeed the natives americains greeted the English without problem warm-heartedly. Nevertheless the caricature that may represent another period. Maybe the author denounces a present certain situations of today, for example the situation the one between the usa USA and the mexique Mexico. Maybe the author doesn't want don't choqued us to be shocked. Today the usa USA is limiting/restricting the immigration, particulary the Mexican immigration one. That's what why the usa USA demands lots of papers and conditions to come in to this country. The borders close.

4. Mon avis

I like this caricature but I think (that) it's a pity they there is not no color. The puzzled/amazed head face of the Englishman is funny. I like the subtlety of this picture: how to represent a present situation of today with by means of/using/ another period and how the author shows that the native Americans are ridiculous.

[amylee68]

Je sais bien que c'est nul mon niveau d'anglais... Ce sont des vielles lacunes du collège, que j'ai longtemps traîné. Je te rassure c'est la seule matière ou c'est comme sa ^^ Je te remercie aussi pour ton aide, et le fait que tu ai tout mis en rouge m'aide, je peux donc comprendre mes erreurs

Mais... en gros tu me demande de ne plus demander d'aide pour l'anglais sur un forum ? ...

[Jean B]

Mais... en gros tu me demande de ne plus demander d'aide pour l'anglais sur un forum ? ...

[amylee68]

J'ai bien pris en compte tes conseils on m'a dit de regarder des films en anglais aussi. J'ai enregistré et envoyé à mon prof mon texte, plus qu'a attendre ma note. Merci pour tout