CV, correction

[Bibiss]

Bonjour,

je suis en classe de terminale. Nous devons écrire un morceau de CV ou plutôt de lettre de motivation suite à l'annonce d'un job. Parmi plusieurs propositions, j'ai choisi comme métier Chef de Rang. Nous devons seulement exposer nos "skills and qualities" donc tout ça en un seul paragraphe sans présentation de CV ect... Le nombre minimum de mot était de 100 mots.

J'ai déjà fait le travail, j'aimerai juste avoir une correction des fautes ou des tournures maladroite que j'ai pu faire.

I was employed as a Chef de rang since two years in North of England. For that reason I think I have the professional experience required to manage a team. Moreover, I studied three years in Germany so I am able to speak german fluently. I can also speak french because that is my origin country. I know this is a job of responsibilities and that's why I would like to be employed. On theone hand I am authoritarian, serious and responsible in case of problem. However I am patient comprehensive and I can be a role model. On theother hand I can bring cheer and dynamism into the team.

Merci.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I was employed as a Chef de rang since for two years in Northern of England. For that reason I think I have the required professional experience required to manage a team. <=L'adjectif se place toujours DEVANT. Moreover, I studied three years in Germany so I can / am able to / speak German fluently. Tous les noms de langues vivantes, tout comme les noms et adjectifs de nationalités, prennent une majuscule. I can also speak French because that it is my origin country mother tongue ou bien ... because France is my native country. mais pas un mélange pays/langue OK ? I know this is a job of involving responsibilities and that's why I would like to get it / be employed. On the one hand I am authoritarian, serious and responsible in case of problem. However I am patient, comprehensive and I can be a role model. On the other hand I can bring cheerfulness and dynamism into the team.

Merci.