Correction d'une présentation orale

[Luckytfc]

Bonjour,

j'ai réalisé un texte à réciter à l'oral présentant mes vacances en anglais. Je possède un niveau assez médiocre et j'aimerais savoir s'il vous plaît, si mon texte comporte des fautes.

Je vous remercie d'avance pour vos réponses très précieuses!

Hello,

My name is xxxxxxx, I'm xxxxxxx years old, I am in terminal xxxxxxx at xxxxxxx High School xxxxxxx and I will talk about my friends my summer holidays 2011 if we can speak of vacation ... or rather summer job. To earn pocket money.I worked in two different companies during the months of July and August. During the month of July I was first recruited by the xxxxxxx .This is a company located in xxxxxxx, in the xxxxxxx department in France.I worked in the 'hybrid selection "in the sunflower and corn.

The aim of this work was to prevent natural pollination (with bees) of corn and of sunflowers.

To this we had to put recycled paper bags over the heads of sunflowers female and male.

(in) being team leader, I had the responsibility of a group of eight people.

I should teach them (how) how to work.

But also assist ,make the same job, as while the monitoring.

Working conditions were hard.

The leaves of corn and sunflower were very hewing,

the tasks were more arduous because of weather conditions .Indeed, we passed from one extreme to the other.

In the morning, the vegetation was wet with the dew and we were soaked. In the afternoon, the weather was sultry, the stifling heat. we changed our boots and our raincoats,to put a cap, a shorts and a t-shirt. We worked only when the weather permitted, that is to say, a dry weather.

Indeed, with the rain;the pockets were porous. They was torn, causing a risk of natural pollination. The theory hours were 8:00 to 12:00, and thirteen hours - at 3:30 p.m. In reality, the schedules and working hours were very irregular and remuneration was barely higher than the smic (Of zero point twenty cents per hour more than the smicThe irregularity of working hours has been penalizing for the salary. This experience persuaded me to stop exercising this kind of summer job. This will remain an excellent professional experience as personal

I finished this job on July 30 two thousand and twelve, which allowed me to win, anyway, a little money.

As from August 1 until August 21, I started a summer job in the national supermarket named xxxxxxx in xxxxxxx in the xxxxxxx department. I was assigned to the radius "cheese and yoghourt." I had to put in place food items on shelves. But I have also counsel clients. That gave me the opportunity to speak in English with customers seeking for specific products.

The technical vocabulary of food products was however an obstacle at first. But in discussing with the clients, I succeeded find the food they wanted. I possessed work fixed hours: Monday to Friday: 6:00 to 12:00, and Saturday, 6:00 to 12:00, 2:10 p.m. to 17:00. The advantage these hours was that they allowed me to have leisure the afternoon. I was able so to spend time with my family, my friends and my girlfriend. What a pleasure to walk, swimming, but also relax during hot weather. This work was interesting because I was able to balance work with my private life. When my work was finished. I went three days in the Mediterranean Sea. We were five: xxxxxxx and my girlfriend xxxxxxx. We were able to enjoy the pleasures of vacation. There was a good atmosphere. We we good fun sum .We swam, we have tanned, discussed, laughs, played American football, Beach soccer, Beach volley and danced in nightclub .After this week with my friends, back to work school. I prepared my new school year two thousand and eleven, two thousand and twelve. I bought school materials and revised my previous years.

These school holidays are somewhat atypical, but they allowed me to earn money.

Merci d'avance de votre aide qui me sera trés précieuse.

Ce travail comptera pour mon bac, merci de prendre cette demande au sérieux.

En vous souhaitant une agréable journée.

Cordialement

Luckytfc

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Hello,

[Luckytfc]

Merci beaucoup pour votre réponse !

Il n'y a pas de probléme.