Corriger mon souvenir

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Coucou, en fête on doit raconter un souvenir devant toute la classe alors j'ai écrit mais j'ignore totalement si le texte est bon.

Merci d'avance.

My story happened in 2004. It was 8 years ago and I was 5.

First, my grandma, my uncle and "my others family members they took me to go to the snowing with them. I had excellent marks in school so my mother gave me permission to miss a school week. My mother and my father didn't come with me, I was happy.

then, we arrived in an apartment, we were on the first floor. My grandma bought me a sledge and when after my oncle finished skying, he taught me how to skiing. An afternoon, we were on a balcony and my uncle asked me if he could me throw by the balcony. I hesitated but I say yes

eventually, there was so much snow and I had not fallen very low. Everyone laughed because I did a weird face. I had hurt my leg but nobody knew because I didn't say

A later, We laughed around the table.

Finally, I never went back with them but it's still an incredible memory.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Coucou,

En fête fait, on doit raconter un souvenir devant toute la classe. Alors j'ai écrit mais j'ignore totalement si le texte est bon.

Merci d'avance.

My story happened in 2004. It was 8 years ago and I was 5.

First, my grandma, my uncle and my others family members they took me with them to go to the snowing skiing.