Correction d'un article de presse

[Ketur77]

Bonjour,

J'ai un article de presse à rédiger en anglais, j'ai donc choisi le sujet du génocide arménien encore récent dans l'actualité. Pouvez-vous me corriger mes fautes, très rapidement si possible ? C'est urgent :s Merci d'avance.

The Law of the Armenian Genocide (title)

The consequences of the law are numerous (headline)

By ******** (reporter)

After seven hours of debate, the Senate adopted on January 23 the bill that punishes the denial of the Armenian genocide in 1915. The Senate adopted the text by 127 votes against 86. Only 237 of 347 elected representatives took part in the vote. Despite the intimidation, pressure and the risk of triggering a major crisis between France and Turkey, the Senate adopted the text voted by the House on December 22. It provides a year in prison and 45,000 euros fine in cases of denial of genocide recognized by French law. The genocide of Jews during World War II and the Armenians, are recognized, but only the negation of the first date was punished.

Moreover Ankara is a major trading partner of France. Their bilateral trade amounted to 12 billion euros in 2011. Outside the European Union (EU), Turkey's third largest trading partner of France, after the United States and China. Turkish Prime Minister Recep Tayyip Erdogan, said on Tuesday, January 24, that after the vote Monday by the Senate of the French law criminalizing denial of genocides, including the Armenians in 1915, Ankara would impose "step by Step "sanctions against France. Retaliatory measures that should be of a diplomatic and cultural but also economic.

January 31, deputies and senators from all political seized the Council against the constitutional text criminalizing denial of Armenian genocide. Pending the decision, the lead blocks its enactment, to the great satisfaction of Ankara. An appeal from the Senate was filed last week with the Constitutional Council. It was initiated by the group's president RDSE (mostly left-wing radicals), Jacques Mézard, and collected 77 signatures, while only 60 are needed for a referral. The Constitutional Council must rule within one month, which period may be reduced to eight days if requested by the government.

The final vote of the law against the denial of genocide, particularly the Armenian genocide did not only attract the wrath of Turkey. The mayor of Paris has lamented, Tuesday, Jan. 24, that the vote on the Armenian genocide was "manipulated for electoral purposes". It is estimated that more than 500 000 French people of Armenian origin, may be able to influence future elections.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

The Law of on the Armenian Genocide Act (title) Sauf erreur, la loi a été définitivement adoptée par le Sénat même si un recours a été déposé.

The consequences of the law are numerous (headline)

By ******** (reporter)

After seven hours of debate, the Senate adopted on January 23 the bill that punishes the denial of the Armenian genocide in 1915. The Senate adopted the text by 127 votes against 86. Only 237 out of the 347 elected representatives took part in the vote. Despite the intimidation, pressure and the risk of triggering a major crisis between France and Turkey, the Senate adopted the text voted by the House on December 22. It provides makes provision for a year in prison imprisonment and a 45,000 euros fine in cases of denial of genocide recognized by French law. The genocide of Jews during World War II and the Armenians during W W II are recognized, but only the negation of the first date former ones was punished until now.

Moreover Ankara is a major trading partner of France. Their bilateral trade amounted to 12 billion euros in 2011. Outside the European Union (EU), Turkey is the third larger trading partner of France after the United States and China. Turkish Prime Minister Recep Tayyip Erdogan said on Tuesday, January 24, that after the vote Monday by the Senate of the French law criminalizing denial of genocides, including the Armenians in 1915, Ankara would impose "step by step "sanctions against France. Retaliatory measures that should be of a diplomatic and cultural but also economic.

January 31, deputies and senators from all political parties seized submitted the case to the Constitutional Council against the constitutional text criminalizing denial of Armenian genocide. Pending the decision, the lead blocks <???? its enactment to the great satisfaction of Ankara. An appeal from the Senate was filed last week with the Constitutional Council. It was initiated by the group's president RDSE (mostly left-wing radicals), Jacques Mézard, and collected 77 signatures, while only 60 are needed for a referral. The Constitutional Council must rule within one month, which period may be reduced to eight days if requested by the government.

The final vote of the law against the denial of genocide, particularly the Armenian genocide did not only attract the wrath of Turkey. The mayor of Paris has lamented, Tuesday, Jan. 24, that the vote on the Armenian genocide was "manipulated for electoral purposes". It is estimated that more than 500 000 French people of Armenian origin, may be able to influence future elections.

[Ketur77]

C'est vrai, mais comment ne pas en donner l'impression justement? Je n'ai pas écrit ces phrases moi-même, question politique tout ça j'ai un peu de mal, mais j'avoue que je n'ai pas eu le temps de les reformuler, pouvez-vous m'aider là-dessus?

[Jean B]

Tu devrais te douter que ton professeur est forcément au courant de la pratique, que dis-je...de la plaie actuelle, du copié-collé.

Ce n'est pas que je refuse de t'aider mais il faut que tu comprennes que ce n'est pas mon rôle de tout reformuler, ce qui d'ailleurs me serait d'autant plus difficile que je ne suis pas extralucide au point de lire dans tes pensées.

So please get back to the job!

[Ketur77]

C'est à rendre pour tout à l'heure... Tant pis

Merci beaucoup =)