Correction Anglais

[Jelicajelica]

Bonjour est ce que quelqu'un peut me corriger mes phrases en anglais svp .Merci énormement

I'm sorry I haven't written before but I was very busy.

I hope that you feel well today my doll as me it's not my day.

Indeed , since this morning all is bad and rotten .

Mommy called me at down and told me that my sweet uncle Bob died .

I hurried up in the station for take a ticket but it was close because of bad weather .

On the way back I met my boyfriend John who was with a girl. Walloping, he betray me!

Then we broke up , and since eleven hours I 'm single .

Finally in the afternoon the station reopen , and I could take my ticket.

Unfortunately when I was back to home for make my suit case , a foolish boy push me in the road.

It's now that the worse nightmare start .

I was stretched on the ground in front of a crowd of peoples.

I couldn't move ,I was paralysed .

Then ambulance come and lead me at the hospital .

I waited 2 hours in the waiting-room .

After all this time , a male nurse came to me for medical examination .

And then shock, he told me that i had a tumor in brain .

Sweetie , I couldn't believe ,I remembered all our best moments , our parties ,our love at first sight in Miami .

And I cried a lot of I was desperated , alone in my hospital room.

I was so young for died .

Mommy and Daddy joined me and comforted me a lot of .

Really vici as you know I never though that Daddy could be one day here for me .

But the worse is that the male nurse return to the room with a satirical smile and said that I had nothing .

He did a mitake with an other people.

It was the most worse day of my life really hun , never I 'll forget .

I 'll not disturb you more with my borring storie .

I hope to see you soon and I wish you the best sweetheart!

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour,

Est-ce que quelqu'un peut me corriger mes phrases en anglais S.V.P. ? Merci énormement.

I'm sorry I haven't written before but I was very busy.

I hope that you feel well today my doll as me it's not my day. ???

Indeed, since this morning all is everything has been bad and rotten .

Mommy called me at dawn and told me that my sweet uncle Bob had died .

I hurried up in to the station for to buy/take a ticket but it was closed because of bad weather.

On the way back I met my boyfriend John who was with a girl. Walloping,??? he betrays me!

Then we broke up, and ever since eleven hours o'clock I 'mve been single.

Finally in the afternoon the station reopened and I could buy/take my ticket.

Unfortunately when I was on the way back to home for make to pack my suitcase, a foolish boy pushed me in onto the road and that It's is now that the very moment when the worst nightmare started.

I was stretched on the ground in front of a crowd of peoples. I couldn't move, I was paralysed.

Then an ambulance came along and lead drove/took me at to the hospital .

I waited 2 hours in the waiting-room .

After all that/this time, a male nurse came to me for a medical examination.

And then I was given a nasty shock when he told me that i I had a tumor in my brain.

Sweetie, I couldn't believe it, I remembered all our best moments, our parties, our love at first sight in Miami.

And I cried a lot of I was desperated driven to despair, alone in my hospital room.

I was so young for to died die.

Mommy and Daddy joined me and comforted me a lot of .

Really Vici as you know I never thought that Daddy could be one day here for me.

But the worst thing is that the male nurse returned to the room with a satirical smile on his face and said that I had nothing was wrong with me.

He did a mitake had mistaken me with for another people person.

It was the most worse worst day of in my life really hun honey,???never I 'll never forget.

I 'll not disturb you more with my boring storiey.

I hope to see you soon and I wish you the best, sweetheart!

[Jelicajelica]

exusez moi mais si vous corriger les gens pour les critiquer mieux vaut supprimer votre correction j'en veux pas je ne veux plus d'aide venant de vous

[Jean B]

À ton aise mais j'ai seulement cru bon de te rendre service en attirant ton attention sur tes lacunes actuelles et à tout faire pour y remédier, c'est tout.

Si tu prends ça pour une critique et ne supportes pas qu'on te le dise, ce n'est pas mon problème.