Rédaction Sur Un Super Hero

[Misslaura]

Bonjour, je dois faire une rédaction sur un super héro. J'aimerais qu'on me corrige les fautes que j'ai pu faite. Merci beaucoup.

Waterwoman is the nickname of a young woman, of 20 years. His real name is Nicole Walter. In real life it is a mother of two children and surgeon. However, Nicole is not as the others, she is algo a superhero who helps and saves people. As all the superhero, she can fly, run very fast and jump very high. He has superpowers related to water. He is able to put out flues, using in some water which go out of the hands and stop floods by drinking all the water. Nicole is a very big woman ans muscular. It has the blond hair, a small nose and the big lips. It is a very beautiful and very nice. She likes discussed with the others and make new meetings. His costume is blue and white. Over it marked there water roughly. It has a mask which reaperates the face to keep a secret identity. From birth, parents of Nicole they know were going to have a superpower. In the course of time, it this accompished. Nobody knows that Nicole has a superpower has part its arents. The parents of Nicole do not know how she could have this extraodinary power.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Sauf erreur totale de ma part dont tu voudras bien m'excuser si ce n'est pas le cas, je pense que tu as passé ton texte à la moulinette d'un traducteur automatique quelconque.

C'est pourquoi j'ai soumis ton texte à la moulinette de google traduction en sens inverse et voici ce que ça donne :

Waterwoman est le surnom d'une jeune femme, de 20 ans. Son vrai nom est Nicole Walter. Dans la vraie vie, c'est une mère de deux enfants et un chirurgien. Cependant, Nicole n'est pas comme les autres, elle est Algo un super héros qui aide et sauve les gens. Comme tous les super-héros, elle peut voler, courir très vite et de sauter très haut. Il a superpuissances liés à l'eau. Il est capable de mettre hors cheminées, utilisant peu d'eau qui sortent des mains et d'arrêter les inondations en buvant toute l'eau. Nicole est une femme très grosse ans musculaire. Il a les cheveux blonds, un petit nez et les grandes lèvres. C'est une très belle et très agréable. Elle aime discuter avec les autres et faire de nouvelles rencontres. Son costume est bleu et blanc. Plus il ya de l'eau il a marqué à peu près. Il a un masque qui reaperates le visage pour garder une identité secrète. Dès la naissance, les parents de Nicole ils savent allions avoir une superpuissance. Dans le cours du temps, il présente accompished. Personne ne sait que Nicole a une superpuissance a une partie de ses Arents. Les parents de Nicole ne sais pas comment elle pouvait avoir ce pouvoir exceptionnels sur.

C'est assez édifiant et cela devrait suffire pour t'aider à repérer au moins les fautes les plus grossières et à les corriger toi-même.

[Misslaura]

Waterwoman is the nickname of a young woman, of 20 years. His real name is Nicole Walter. In real life it is a mother of two children and is a surgeon. However, Nicole is not as the others, she is a superhero who helps and saves people. As all the superhero, she can fly, run very fast and jump very high. It has super powers in relation to water. It is capable of putting out fires, using water that comes out of his hands and stop floods by drinking all the water. Nicole is a great woman and muscular. She has the blond hair, a small nose and the big lips. She is a woman very beautiful and very nice. She likes discussed with the others and make new meetings. His costume is blue and white. On it marked WATER. She has a mask which covering the face to keep a secret identity. From birth, parents of Nicole knew she was going to have a super power. Over time, this has been achieved. Nobody knows that Nicole has a superpower has part its parents. The parents of Nicole do not know how she could have this extraodinary power.

[Jean B]

Waterwoman is the nickname of a young 20-year old woman, of 20 years. His Her real name is Nicole Walter. In real life it she is a mother of two children and is a surgeon. However, Nicole is not as like the others, she is a superhero who helps and saves people. As all the superheroes she can fly, run very fast and jump very high. It She has super powers in relation to water. It She is capable of putting out fires, using water that comes out of his her hands and stops floods by drinking all the water. Nicole is a great woman and muscular woman. She has the blond hair, a small nose and the big lips. She is a woman very beautiful and very nice woman. She likes discussed to talk / discuss with the others and make new meetings acquaintances. His Her costume is blue and white. WATER is marked on it. marked WATER. She has a mask which covering covers the her face to keep a secret her identity secret. From birth, parents of As soon as she was born, Nicole's parents knew she was going to have a super power. Over time this has been achieved. Nobody knows that Nicole has a superpower has part its except for her parents. The parents of Nicole do not know how she could have this extraodinary power.

[Misslaura]

Merci pour votre aide ! J'ai essayé de faire des efforts. J'ai beaucoup de problèmes en anglais. Je dois refaire une autre rédaction où il faut inventer un scénario de mon super héro :

Nicole was born in a small city near New York. At three years, she saw a fires in New York. Suddenly the water comes out of his hands and she succeeds to put out the fire. Few days after, she asks her mother xx make him a costume in relation to extraodinary power. Her mother creates a blue and white costume makes above WATER. In addition to his work as a surgeon, she is (Pompier volontaire) Once there is a fire in New York, his super power is realized. She turns on her and her costume appears! She comes even before the firefighters because She runs very fast. When firefighters arrived, fire is almost out. It's a strange woman!

[Jean B]

Reviens à ma réponse précédente et prends en note tous les conseils que je t'y donne afin de faire ton auto-correction et surtout ne plus refaire les fautes que je t'ai déjà signalées. Or, il y en a et de très vilaines que j'ai balisées en rouge !

Sans ça, je ne continuerai pas de t'aider car je n'ai absolument pas la vocation pour prêcher dans le désert.

Dis-toi qu'une correction bien comprise doit être un progrès, sinon elle ne sert à rien.