Correction D'une Chanson

[justine59670]

bonjour,

on devait écrire une chanson, et on va dire que l'anglais n'est pas mon fort, surtout a cause de la traduction.

Je l'ai eu a rendre et ma prof ma dit de reprendre car il y avait trop de mot à mot ou de traduction mal tournée et que defois le sens ou le contexte n'y était pas , donc j'aimerais bien qu'on m'aide svp ....je suis perdu

world is filled in red

We have to forget the toys of our children

ours eyes are red

and we have probably lost a friend, a brother, a sister

days are red

and boredom rises day after day

i'm alone in front of my white sheet of paper

in a trenche sitting surrounded by injured men

where they are mixed with men and rats

and blood is only invading the front

as for the smell of corpses, it bacomes unbearable

weapons and soldiers are tired

tired of the incessant shots

tired of the enemy who is uncreasingly threatening

tired cries of despair ans suffering

it haunts my heart my heart and my soul for ever

always this fear with it friend, the death

in my head constantly i remember

the cries of my soldiers

in this world, nobody loves nobody

while ground is covered with death and shells

the fear of death is felt

that's why peace

is one of the essential values of life

peace in the world, for eyes filled with joyce

stop killing today

so that tomorrow, the long days of peace it promise to us

merci d'avance