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[fangs-up]

Bonjour, serait-il possible de me dire qu'elles sont mes erreurs en les soulignant afin que je les corrige svp ?

The Other Side of Truth was written by Beverley Naidoo and first published in 2000. She has always been a very committed writer, writing books, mostly for the younger generation, to make them aware of the injustices in the world.

In this novel, Beverley Naidoo deals with the lack of freedom of express in Nigeria. She denounces the extreme dictatorship in this country and she defends the rights of political refugees.

Here, she writes about the fate of two children, Sade and Femi, whose mother gets shot because their father wrote the truth about the dictatorship in Nigeria in the newspaper he writes for. The story relates their fleeing to London for safety, the multiple problems they encounter there and their heroic struggle to get their father freed from detention in England.

Chapter 31 relates the beginning of Sade's plan to get her father out of the detention centre. We are going to talk about the importance of this chapter, and then we are going to analyze Sade's feelings.

At first, we understand that this chapter is meaningful thanks to Sade's dream. The beginning of the dream clearly appears with the announcing of the dream as we see on line 29 "Sade had a dream" and the change of font from line 31 to line 46. In addition, we see that there are the characteristics of the unreal and the fantastic as we see with sentences such as "He is in a desert and his pale hair is wind-blown, dusted with fine dry red sand" on lines 33 and 34, "the red dust vanishes" on line 43, "suddenly a photograph flashes on to the screen. It is of a round-faced man with daring eyes, a broad handsome smile and a pipe with a curved stem. Mr. Saro-Wiwa!" from line 38 to line 48.

As a result, Sade's plan appears into her mind. We clearly see the importance of this plan with the title of the chapter, which is "Sade's plan". Besides, the references about the plan are multiple such as the sentence "but an idea was already hazily trying to enter her mind" on lines 48 and 49. It becomes increasingly precise as we see with the following sentence "Gradually it became clearer and sharper, demanding that se think about it" on lines 50 and 51. We can talk about the following chapters, where Sade puts her plan at execution by seeing Mr. Seven O'Clock.

The news of her father accelerates her will to put this plan in execution. There is a discomfort due to this news as we see with the sentence "Sade could tell that she was trying hard to be bright as she prepared their cereal and sandwiches" from line 56 to line 58. However, her father is determined as we understand with the following sentence on lines 61 and 62 "Papa, however, spoke openly about the latest turn in events" and with the expression "there was no time to lose" on lines 65 and 66. The succession of the events shows the speed their actions need to have from line 66 to line 68 "Mr. Nathan would make an immediate appeal and write to the British Home Secretary while Papa would send his letter to the Union of Journalists". We see that Sade is really attentive to her father's word as we can read on lines 68 and 69 "Sade listened". We could say that her plan arrives at the right moment.

Furthermore, this chapter brings to us Sade's feelings. She really feels the need to talk to her father as we see on line 3 "Yet there were so many things she desperately wanted to talk with him"and on lines 6 and 7 "she needed his advice about what to do about Mariam and, of course, Marcia". He looks like a protector, he's an example to his daughter.

Her concerns of little girl are mixed with adults concerns, harder to face, which aren't of her age as we see with the sentence on lines 4 and 5 "Talking about Mama would be the hardest of all". Her concerns of little girl aren't the most important since she wants to push all of that behind her mind as we see on lines 17 and 18 "She had managed to push all of that to the back of her mind". She has to act and think like an adult to hope to get her father freed from detention.

Besides, Sade is scared since she cannot sleep as we read on line 30 "When eventually she fell asleep in the early hours of the morning". She doesn't feel right either as we see with the use of the word "troubling" and thanks to the sentence "her head felt heavy as if it wanted to pull her back into sleep". She doesn't feel safe as we understand with sentences such as "Once again, everything was spinning wildly out of control" on lines 19 and 20 and "How would 'We must be patient' help then? Who would even know what was happening to Papa apart from themselves?" from lines 22 to 24. The succession of questions on lines 59 and 74 and the use of the modal "would" prove that she really needs answers. We can put this idea in parallel with the sentence "Yet there were so many things she desperately wanted to talk about with him" on line 3.

To conclude, this chapter is essential since it is the beginning of Sade's plan, her envy to put this plan in execution. Moreover, we clearly see the growth of Sade because she tries to put her problems to the back of her mind, she desperately wants to help her father: this is the most important at this moment

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Personnellement, j'ai pour habitude de baliser les erreurs en rouge.

Quelques rares corrections directes te sont données en caractères gras bleus.

Tu as une bonne maîtrise de l'anglais. Bonne continuation.

Bonjour,

Serait-il possible de me dire quelles sont mes erreurs en les soulignant afin que je les corrige SVP ?

The Other Side of Truth was written by Beverley Naidoo and first published in 2000. She has always been a very committed writer, writing books, mostly for the younger generation, to make them aware of the injustices in the world.

In this novel, Beverley Naidoo deals with the lack of freedom of express in Nigeria. She denounces the extreme dictatorship in this country and she defends the rights of political refugees.

Here, she writes about the fate of two children, Sade and Femi whose mother gets shot because their father wrote the truth about the dictatorship in Nigeria in the newspaper he writes for. The story relates their fleeing to London for safety, the multiple problems they encounter there and their heroic struggle to get their father freed from detention in England.

Chapter 31 relates the beginning of Sade's plan to get her father out of the detention centre. We are going to talk about the importance of this chapter, and then we are going to analyze Sade's feelings.

At first, we understand that this chapter is meaningful thanks to Sade's dream. The beginning of the dream clearly appears with the announcing of the dream as we see on line 29 "Sade had a dream" and the change of font from line 31 to line 46.

[fangs-up]

Merci d'avoir répondu aussi rapidement JRB !

The beginning of the dream clearly appears with the announcing of the dream...

[Jean B]

Merci d'avoir répondu aussi rapidement JRB !

[fangs-up]

Ah, oui, je n'y avais même pas pensé A force d'entendre dire de faire toujours plus "élaboré", on "oublie" ce qui est simple mais correct.

Enfin, merci beaucoup pour votre aide !

[Jean B]

Ah, oui, je n'y avais même pas pensé A force d'entendre dire de faire toujours plus "élaboré", on "oublie" ce qui est simple mais correct.