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Sujet : Giving up cars : write an essay : An incrasing number of people think that we should give up private cars and opt for alternative means of transportation. What is your opinion ?

1) introduisez le sujet de maniere générale

2) développez vos idées :

a. expliquez ce qui est reproché au transport routier en général.

b. présentez les moyens alternatifs de transport qui existent actuellement.

c. pesez le pour et le contre de ces nouveaux types de transport. Dites si vous pensez que les gens sont prêts à adopter de nouveaux comportements

3) conclusion :donnez votre opinion et justifiez-la brièvement

Voici mon travail, je demande votre aide, correction et si il y a des améliorations à faire faites moi vos proposition s'il vous plaît . Merci beaucoup

"It Currently accout for 29% of emissions copared thesis to only 13% in 1960. There has been a considerable rise in greenhouse gas emissions.

We must act: today, the public agrees to decrease car use and develop alternative solutions, we are witnessing a boom in self-service bicycles, a greenwashing is not possible by all the company.

a) The impact of road transport pollution is first, second, the noise of vehicles and thirdly the level of congestion on the roads.

First human-caused pollution can have a major impact on health and the biosphere as evidenced by exposure to pollutants and global warming transforms the atmosphere of the Earth and its ecosystem, causing disease outbreaks hitherto unknown in certain geographical areas, migration of certain species or even their extinction if they can not adapt to their new biophysical environment.

Hence the law of natural selection developed by famed English naturalist Charles Darwin.

Second, the omnipresent noise in our cities and our lives can become 80 decibels from the real noise. The impact on human health of excessive noise are: depression, decreased ability to listen, insomnia and hypertension.

Thirdly, it is estimated that the delays associated with congested highways, streets and transport systems around the world result in productivity losses amounting to hundreds of billions of dollars annually. Property damage, personal injury, worsening air pollution and inefficient fuel consumption are also part of all adverse effects of traffic congestion

b) c) Alternative means of transportation that currently exist are: (positive and negative points)

• 1 Individual people travel

1.1 Walking : + physical activity/ - not fast enough1.2 The skateboard, skateboarding : + physical activity and fun / - impractical, not fast enough1.3 The roller, roller skates : + physical activity and fun / - impractical, not fast enough1.4 Scooters :+ physical activity and fun / - impractical, not fast enough1.5 Cycles : + physical activity and fun/ - not fast enough1.6 The "char à voile": + fun / - only on beach

• 2 Collective of people travel

2.1 The carpool : + economic, ecological / - more organization

2.2 The car-sharing : + not necessary to have a car / - mainly in the big city2.3 Public transit : + practical, ecological / - not always available where the desired2.4 Sorting (or PRT) : + inexpensive, minimally invasive, low pollution and very practical./ - not always available where the desiredhitchhiking : + economic / - dangerous

Several campaign for the protection of the environment such as WWF and others are taking steps to raise awareness with posters and slogans related. Electric cars may just begin to flow on our roads. Following natural disasters, global warming, loss of some species and new diseases. To my mind, man has become aware of the consequences suffered by the world's need and is close to my avi to act! So for me as people are willing to adopt new behaviors to save our planet.

In conclusion, it is imperative that we change and as we look toward a more natural way of life, cleaner, "greener" because our planet reaches a point of no return, it can no longer suffer the stupidity of Man. Man should live with nature and innovative technology and comfort not bad for it

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Sauf erreur, la présence répétée de microsofttranslator dans ton texte me fait craindre qu'il en soit issu intégralement.

Si tel est bien le cas, je doute que quiconque te réponde, moi y compris.