Correction Devoir

[yuna-chan]

Bonjour,pourriez vous s'il vous plait jeter un coup d'oeil sur ce que j'ai écrit( en faite je devais créer mon propre hero pour l'anglais.)

en m'indiquant si possible les endroits ou je me suis trompée ou

où la formulation est maladroite, merci d'avance.

Ina world where reign injustice,lies,cruelty and violence, life become very difficult to live.Another the economic crisis and politicalproblem leads the world in the chaos.People do not know what to do to for live in a world where the cruelty human will no longer excite.Justly,we have an example with the case of America.For to fight against communism who excite in Vietnam they have declared war against Vietcong.However,they had not chance to win if they go there, without their best fighter Pax-man.He is a superman who lived on the moon and back on earth during the Lunar Module.He knew integrates without problem into american life.

Pax-man is an honest man who never lies.He is also a brave person who is not afraid to risk his life for others.He is sometimes naive and believes in human goodness very much.And for him every souls worth saving.He is very attached to américan values.Pax-man is a great man,which measures 1.95 cm for a weight of 120 kg.He has an athletics body,long black hair whith blue eyes who is sparkling brightly.Just perfect.Besides all that he have strange povers:he can fly,project the laser trought his eyes and his invulnerable.So whith all these quality that this man had ,the victory is assured for the american people.

Trought 15 year of war against the Vietcong,the soldier came back on american soil whith a victory in his pocket.From that day he became the protector of América and therefore of humanity.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour,

Pourriez-vous s'il vous plait jeter un coup d'oeil sur ce que j'ai écrit ? (en fait, je devais créer mon propre héro pour l'anglais) en m'indiquant si possible les endroits où je me suis trompé ou

où la formulation est maladroite. Merci d'avance.

In a world where reign injustice,lies,cruelty and violence pervade/exist/reign, life is becoming very difficult to live.

[yuna-chan]

Bonjour,JRB et merci d'avoir eu le courage de corriger mon texte qui je sais comportait plein de fautes de tous genres. Je te remercie pour le conseil en ce qui concerne " Pratique de l'anglais de A à Z " (Hatier éditeur).