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Mon sujet est : What does the word america mean to you ?

Voila ma réponse:

The USA it is one of the biggest country to the world, is a world power.

The American world it is another world, multicultural world with Hispanic, American afros, several religions, Catholics, Protestants, orthodoxes, Islam …

For the Americans religious feasts are very important as Christmas, or Thanksgiving.

And the family has a big importance, they are very to weld, it is one of the big values of this country.

The USA it is also Barack Obama, the first black president of United States of America, he also received the Nobel Peace Prize.

The United States it is the world of the cinema with Hollywood, the best singers, the best actors.

The United States it is also known for these high schools which make all the young people dream through movies, with the famous end-of-the-year ball, the importance of the sport with the basketball, the US football, the baseball, the feminine football and also the graduation ceremony with the holding and the hat about the colors of the high school.

Then the faculties, with campus bigger than some cities of France, the brotherhoods …

But the United States it is not a world which makes dream, there is a large number of murder every year, war, hostage taking of gang, acts of terrorism as September 11th, 2001.

In spite of, the dangers which the USA can get, this earth will remain a dream for me, my American dream.

J'aimerai savoir si il y a des fautes de grammaire et conjugaison ou autres.

Merci

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Mon sujet est : What does the word America mean to you ?

Voilà ma réponse :

The USA it is one of the largest/greatest/biggest countries to in the world, it is a world power.