Un Super Hero

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Edit modération : à l'avenir, merci de ne pas abuser des balises BBCode, ce qui a pour effet de rendre difficile la lecture du texte.

Bonjour, j'aimerais que quelqu'un me corriger mon devoir svp merci

donc je devais imaginer "un super héro"

The World of Today

One universe has been created ,a lot of days to built it but just one day, one minut or one second to ravaged it.

This world bears , he is afraid every day of all this threats: Economic , financial, terrorist , or sanitary.

Thoses persons who destroy it whitout reasons whereas it support,collect, and undergo.

It burnt, explode,scream because of what the man do with his hand, his hurt or his mind.

Bombs explode,tickets fly away, sicknesses affect it as to them cyclone,storm,flood drown it .

He died every moments under silence of population.

But what those mans are doing? Why they let it disappear? How help it?

Those questions are in mind of everybody , good or bad , they want help it .

Each do mistakes for his pleasure whitout think to the consequence on the others

But one day, a strange creature come to the world ,

His name was Peace, like the peace in the world .

Name: Peace

Surname :lovewar

Age:2010

like: his name

hate:his surname

weigh:987kilos

height:10m34

Hardly arrived to the earth , it scream in all corners

« guys, children, boys, girls, ladies , mans, today we will go to the trocadero »

The persons though it was the end of the world, but in fact it was really the end of the world ,and the start of a new world with equality and love

Peace destroy all jail, psycatric hospital , and hospital.

He took all the world in his back and put them in the Trocadero

He said: « we are here because of you , and just because of you , im a hero, im famous because this thing who you call world has my surname lovewar i hate him .I will learn you how hate him also.

First of all we will do a big list as children when they do it for Santa Claus of all persons wish and little by little we will have the perfect world »

During 3 days the persons write a list , with all their wishes.

When Peace read it he laugh and said « Really? You want it , ok so let's go to do it but nobody here understand what is a perfect world, if i want a erase my surname but if i erase it i lost my celebrity somebody understand? A perfect world is not a world where all is all otherwise it will be borring .

It's a world where there is a mixt of bad and good things .

After explain to them what is a perfect world, he took them in his back and show them all the beauty of those countries , those landscapes but also the sadness of those countries after he said: « If I put out sadness and let just the beauty How will be life? Everybody same, everybody happy it will be borring so happy can't exist whitout sadness »

He brought them in United Stated and Africa and replied « You see in Africa there is famine and in the United State there is economic,financial problems and that it's just because of you , you can see the same situation in all the continent of this world »

In this world there is a lot of problem racism, famine, poverty , terrorist, economicand financial problems but Peace said « if you want your perfect world you put out all of you do who is bad and keep sadness and happiness because it's thing who never we can put out they are precious in our lives .

Im brawvy , tall , and big but i can't erase what you did , it's jus you who can erase that so you are also hero and we are all hero »

Twenty days after, persons took words of Peace at their heart , and for thanks him , every day their try to do their best to keep the world well .