A Decent Job

[manonsuissa]

Bonjours,

Le sujet est de consiste à continuer un dialogue téléphonique entre Brian et son fils. J'ai essayé de faire une petite rédaction. Pouvez-vous s'il-vous plait me corriger mes fautes ? Merci beaucoup pour votre aide. Voilà mon dialogue. Edit modérateur : les accents, majuscules, ponctuation ne sont pas facultatifs en français mais OBLIGATOIRES. Merci de t'en souvenir. JRB

"But why did not you trust me ,I'm giong to go on with my dream and to become a rock singer and I will be famous"said brian

"I'm going to say you ,if you hadn't droped out ,you would have been secure man and ...."

"Give me a break and stop to control my life .Firstly I was bored stiff at school for example I slept all the day and tou spent money for nothing but if I become a famous guy I could live to my passion and you will regret "interruped bryan

"You live in your dreams Brian ,the life is tought and event if you become famous How many time this celebrity last?You are ruinning your life"explainded his father

"I don't care about what do you say let me breath and blossom becouse I want to achieve my goal even if you disagree"anwered bryan

"I'm your dad and you must respect me and listen to me .You must come back to home and leave the song."The fatther got mad

"Stop Dad I'm leaving town today and I leave you and I will comeback when I suceed"The Bryan hung the telephone

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjours,

Le sujet est de consiste à continuer un dialogue téléphonique entre Brian et son fils. J'ai essayé de faire une petite rédaction. Pouvez-vous s'il-vous plait me corriger mes fautes ? Merci beaucoup pour votre aide. Voilà mon dialogue. Edit modérateur : les accents, majuscules, ponctuation ne sont pas facultatifs en français mais OBLIGATOIRES. Merci de t'en souvenir. JRB

"But why didn't you trust me? I'm going to go on with my dream and (to) become a rock singer and I will be famous", said Brian

[manonsuissa]

Merci beaucoup de votre aide .Bryan est le fils et dans l'énoncé on ne donne pas le nom du père .Voilà le dialogue que j'ai essayé de corriger

"But why didn't you trust me? I'm going to go on with my dream and (to) become a rock singer and I will be famous", Brian said

"I'm going to tell you,if you hadn't dropped out, you would have been a secure man and..."

"Give me a break and stop controlling my life.First I was bored stiff at school, for example I slept all the day and you spent money for nothing, but if I became a famous guy I could live up to my passion and you will regret " Brian interrupted his father

"You live in your dreams Brian, life is tough and even if you become famous how long will this celebrity last? You are ruining your life", his father explainded to his son

"I don't care about what you say, let me breathe and blossom because I want to achieve my goal even if you disagree", Brian anwered

"I'm your dad and you must respect me and listen to me. You must come back home and leave singing. "The father got mad to Brian

"Stop Dad I'm leaving town today and I leave you and I will come back when I suceed" Bryan hung up .

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup de votre aide.Bryan est le fils et dans l'énoncé on ne donne pas le nom du père.