Besoin D'aide Urgente Pour Les Temps

[BigBounty]

Bonjour,

Voilà, j'ai un devoir à réciter à l'oral, je l'ai fait et appris mais je suis vraiment nul en conjugaison.

J'aurais besoin de quelqu'un qui puisse m'aider en m'indiquant quel temps utiliser dans mon texte et corriger mes fautes graves s'il y en a.

C'est très urgent car je dois le réciter lundi.

Voici mon texte :

The 12th May, Meg Mystery was murdered. She was the wife of Paul Mystery, a famous hypnotist.

She was killed by Fiona norgrove with a knife. Fiona was a Paul's fan. During the last show, she was hypnotised by Paul and, during the night, she has killed Meg.

Paul has killed his wife because, before the show, thzy had a row and Meg has said him what she has found an other man who loves her.

Paul, furious, has promished to kill his wife. After the murder, Inspector Jones was in charge of the enquiry. He thinks it's not Paul because he has a perfect alibi.

Yhe enquiry is difficult because the police hasn't clues. But the 17th May, Fiona Norgrove wasarrested for the murder. The Inspector has a waterlight clues : she was filmed by a security camera

killing Meg Mystery.At the courtroom she has pleaded not guilty but she hasn't alibi to present.

Merci de votre aide !

[Maxzi]

Bonjour,

Je vais essayer de t'aider :

The 12th May, Meg Mystery was murdered

Meg Mystery was murdered on 12th May

A l'oral tu dois dire "on the twentieth of May" pour "on 12th May" (si je ne me trompe pas)

She was killed by Fiona norgrove with a knife

La répétition est lourde. Essaye d'utiliser une structure résultative (si c'était dans ton programme)

She was hypnotised by Paul and, during the night, she has killed Meg

She was hypnotised by Paul and, during the night, she killed Meg

Tu dois rester au prétérit (past simple) et c'est valable pour tout le reste de ton texte (avec les concordances de temps qui s'imposent bien sur).

Meg has said him what she has found an other man who loves her

Meg told him that she had found an other man who loved her

-> prétérit et concordance de temps

Paul, furious, has promished to kill his wife. After the murder, Inspector Jones was in charge of the enquiry. He thinks it's not Paul because he has a perfect alibi.

Yhe enquiry is difficult because the police hasn't clues. But the 17th May, Fiona Norgrove wasarrested for the murder. The Inspector has a waterlight clues : she was filmed by a security camera killing Meg Mystery.At the courtroom she has pleaded not guilty but she hasn't alibi to present

-> prétérit et concordance de temps

Voilà, j'ai fait ça en vitesse donc si tu as des questions n'hésite pas.

[BigBounty]

Merci de tes conseils.

J'ai refait le texte peux-tu me dire s'il contient encore des erreurs. Merci.

On the twelth of May, Meg Mystery was killed by Fiona Norgrove with a knife. Meg was the wife of Paul Mystery, a famous hypnotist.

Fiona was a Paul's fan. During the last show, she was hypnotised by Paul and, during the night, she killed Meg Mystery.

Paul killed his wife because, before the show, they had a row and Meg told him that she had found an other man who loved her.

Paul, furious, promished to kill his wife. After the murder, Inspector Jones was in charge of the enquiry. He thought it wasn't Paul because he had a

perfect alibi. The enquiry was difficult because the police hadn't clues. But the seventieth of May, Fiona Norgrove was arrested for the murder.

The inspector had a waterlight clues : She was filmed by a security camera killing Meg Mystery. At the courtroom she had pleaded not guilty but she hadn't alibi to present.

[BigBounty]

Merci de tes conseils.

J'ai refait le texte peux-tu me dire s'il contient encore des erreurs. Merci.

On the twelth of May, Meg Mystery was killed by Fiona Norgrove with a knife. Meg was the wife of Paul Mystery, a famous hypnotist.

Fiona was a Paul's fan. During the last show, she was hypnotised by Paul and, during the night, she killed Meg Mystery.

Paul killed his wife because, before the show, they had a row and Meg told him that she had found an other man who loved her.

Paul, furious, promished to kill his wife. After the murder, Inspector Jones was in charge of the enquiry. He thought it wasn't Paul because he had a

perfect alibi. The enquiry was difficult because the police hadn't clues. But the seventieth of May, Fiona Norgrove was arrested for the murder.

The inspector had a waterlight clues : She was filmed by a security camera killing Meg Mystery. At the courtroom she had pleaded not guilty but she hadn't alibi to present.

Est-ce correct??