Correction D'une Traduction

[MlL]

Bonjour, je dois rédiger un texte, pouvez vous corriger mes erreurs s'il vous plait

My summer holidays was fantastic!

Firt, my best friend came at home for a week. It was sunny so we did several activities.

We were in the swimming-pool over afternoon, and we took a sunbathe. We have equally

did horse riding, do cycling and we did a bike... It was great!

Then, the last week of July, I was in Toulouse with my sister. I was to my aunt and my uncle.

I went away by car, the road trip was very long! The first day, the weather was cloudy but then

it was sunny and very dry. I was in the large outdoor pool, in the sea (the sand was burning!)

I was to a Mexican party with my cousins. I didn't eat traditionnal food, but meals were very good.

I retourned Sunday.

When I came back, I was at my best friend for five days. We slept in the tent.

Finally, Wednesday before the start of the school, I was at my friend. We did a picnic with

some friends. It was a beautiful afternoon.

My summer holiday was wonderfull! Roll on the next summer holidays!!

Thank you!

[Maxzi]

Bonjour,

Personnellement, je changerais la tournure de certaines phrases mais je préfère laisser ça aux "experts".

Je vais essayer de corriger tes fautes de grammaire et de vocabulaire.

My summer holidays was fantastic!

My summer holidays were fantastic

Firt, my best friend came at home for a week

Firstly, my best friend came to my place and stayed a week (pas sur du tout)

Idéalement tu devrais mettre came home mais ça signifierait : est rentré chez lui

We were in the swimming-pool over afternoon

We were in the swimming-pool in the afternoon (J'ai pas compris ce que tu voulais dire par over afternoon)

and we took a sunbathe.

and we took a sunbath.

We have equally did horse riding

We also went horse riding

I was to my aunt and my uncle

I was at my aunt and uncle's house

I was to a Mexican party with my cousins

I went to a Mexican party with my cousins

I didn't eat traditionnal food

Si tu veux dire "je n'ai pas l'habitude de manger...", c'est : I am not used to eating...

but meals were very good

but the meals were very good

Wednesday before the start of the school

The Wednesday before the start of the school

We did a picnic with some friends

We had a picnic with some friends

My summer holiday was wonderfull

My summer holidays were wonderful

Voilà et bonne continuation.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Outre les corrections de Maxzi, voici quelques autres précisions et/ou suggestions.

Le balisage en rouge doit t'aider à repérer tes fautes et à les corriger quand ce n'est pas déjà fait.

Bonjour, je dois rédiger un texte, pouvez vous corriger mes erreurs s'il vous plait

My summer holidays was fantastic! <accord avec le nom sujet pluriel.

First, my best friend came at home for a week. It was sunny so we did several activities.

We were in the swimming-pool over throughout the afternoon, < tout au long de and we took a sunbathe. sunbathed / had a sun-bath. We have equally did horse riding, do cycling and we did a bike... It was great!

Then, during the last week of July, I was stayed in Toulouse with my sister. I was to my aunt and my uncle.

I went away by car, the road trip drive was very long! <déplacement en voiture = drive The first day, the weather was cloudy but then it was sunny and very dry. I was in the large outdoor pool, in the sea (the sand was burning!) <la piscine dans la mer ??? Relis-toi !

I was invited to a Mexican party with my cousins. I didn't have eat traditionnal food, but meals were very good.

I returned on Sunday.

When I came back, I was <ne peux-tu employer un autre verbe plus précis? at my best friend for five days. We slept in the tent.

Finally, on the Wednesday before the start of the school, I was<encore ! at my friend. We did had a picnic with

some friends. It was a beautiful afternoon.

My summer holidays were wonderful! Roll on Can't wait for the next summer holidays!!< Vivement les prochaines grandes vacances !

Thank you!

[MlL]

Merci beaucoup de m'avoir corrigé. Je ferrais ferai plus attention la prochaine fois à utiliser d'autres verbes que "BE" .

[Jean B]

Avec plaisir.

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