namio11 Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 Signaler Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 Bonjour . J'aurais besoin d'aide pour une correction , ce texte est une histoire qui fait suite à un texte donné . Un point sur les révisions grammaticales que je pourrais faire me serai également utile . En vous remerciant . Old Geibel decided to take up the challenge . It was more exciting than making a mechanical toy . As soon as he arrived in his worshop, he began to imagine how to make this ideal dancer .Six months were necessary . Christmas was the time of the most important ball of the year . Old Geibel estimated that it was the greatest occasion to test his last invention . Dressed in their more beautiful clothing , Old Geibell, his daugther and their surprised guest went to the place of the ballroom . They were accomodated by the mayor who claired the evening . « - Let me present to you my nephew just arrived from Paris . Nice to meet you, said the the host of the evening . » All the glances of the young girls turned to him : he was so elegant , so beautiful .There was too little novelty here. All the young girls checked their make -up and their clothing and it was a true contest of smiling .The orchestra started the first waltz to open the ball . The false nephew invited the most pretty girl . « May I invite you to dance ? » Flattered, the young lady accepted immediatly . The most marvellous show started .Grace and elegance joined together . The waltz ended but the dancer didn't . One dance, two dances and he turned and turned ...The dancer took to smoke . Old Geibel felt to gain by panic .How to save tha young lady? She was beginning to be exhausted . From the back of the room appeared suddenly a wispy young man . He evaluated the situation and took a glass of punch , he threw it to the face of the dancer . The terrific mechanic stopped dead . All the guest run to help the girl and to discuss what had just occured . « In spite of their defect, the real men are still the best » said a young girl as a conclusion.
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 Bonsoir, En t'aidant de mes indications, rectifie tes erreurs balisées en rouge. Quelques corrections te sont offertes en caractères gras. Bonne continuation. Bonjour . J'aurais besoin d'aide pour une correction. Ce texte est une histoire qui fait suite à un texte donné. Un point sur les révisions grammaticales que je pourrais faire me serait également utile. En vous remerciant.
namio11 Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 Auteur Signaler Posté(e) le 4 décembre 2009 Un grand merci , c'est vraiment impec comme type de correction!! oui, j'ai encore du boulot devant moi et votre aide m'est précieuse
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