Correction D'un Paragraphe En Anglais

[ahmeddur]

bonjour je doit faire un paragraphe en anglais

pouvez vous me corrigé mes faute svp

voici se que j'ai écrit:

My favorite day in Christmas hollidays, when I went to the library, its was on wednesday 25 december. In effect, it was the day where I discoverd a magazine who spoke about work's children because I learnt a lots of thinks like from one end of the earth to another,one finds children in fields,in mines,in work shops and in kitchens. More over , in the and of the magazinz,it asked to find several solutions and there I found three solutions.Knew to develop my critical mind.It's these who I pleased.

merci de vos correction

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour,

Je dois <faire> écrire un paragraphe en anglais.

Pouvez-vous me corriger mes fautes SVP ?

Voici ce que j'ai écrit:

My <favorite day in> Christmas holiday favourite day was the one when I went to the library. <its> It was on Wednesday 25 December. In effect, it was the day <where> when I discovered a magazine <who spoke> with an article about <work's> children's work.<because> I learnt a lot<s> of things. <like from one end of the earth to another> All over the world, one finds children in fields, in mines, in workshops and in kitchens. Moreover, in the end of the <magazine> article, it was asked to find several solutions and there I found three (solutions). <Knew to> The article helped me develop my critical mind. <It's these who I> That's what pleased me.

Merci de vos corrections.

[ahmeddur]

Bonjour,

De rien.