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[PoPoChannel]

Bonjour tout le monde, je dois effectuer une news chaque semaine en anglais et j'aurais besoin d'une personne pour corriger mes erreurs.

alcohol should be completed banned sales to minors in early 2009. The minister of health Roselyne Bachelot, has indicated its intention to restrict acces to alcohol for young. Indeed, in recent years, the trend of excessive alcohol are (banalisé) among french youth. Supermarkets and beverage (vendeurs) must ensure that young people are over 18 years to sell alcohol. In cases of infugments, sanction is a fine of 7000 euros, in the case of repeated, sanction are one year imprisonment and a fine of 15000 euros.

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

En rouge, ce qu'il faut supprimer.

En bleu, les corrections et ajouts.

L'utilisation du dictionnaire te semble étrangère. N'en serais-tu pas pourvu(e) ?

Tâche de tirer profit de cette correction pour comprendre tes erreurs et ne plus les refaire à l'avenir.

Ce sera déjà un progrès.

See you.

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alcohol Selling alcoholic drinks to minors should be completely banned in early 2009. The Minister of Health, Roselyne Bachelot, has indicated its her intention to restrict young people's access to alcoholic drinks. Indeed, in recent years, the trend of excessive drinking of alcoholic beverages are (banalisé) has become commonplace among French youth. Supermarkets and beverage (vendeurs) sellers must ensure that young people are over 18 years to sell them alcoholic drinks . In case of infringement, sanction is a fine of they will be fined 7000 euros and in the case event of repeated a second offence, sanction are they could get one year imprisonment and a be fined of 15000 euros.

[PoPoChannel]

Merci beaucoup pour ton aide bravo pour ta rapidité.

Je vais essayer de m'améliorer en anglais.

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup pour ton aide bravo pour ta rapidité.

Je vais essayer de m'améliorer en anglais.