Aide Pour Corriger Mes Faute En Anglais

[melissa08]

enfaite c'est assez urgent je tvous laisse mon texte si quelqu'un pourrais me corriger mes fautes se serais sympas:

This new technology, could proven are very interested for several circumstance. This innovation would make It possible to locate a person thanks to her cellphone.

For example this system of localization would make it possible to come to assistance has certain person in danger: in avalanche in mountain, or then when certain person finds herself wounded at the time of an accident without being able do not give their position.

This would be also useful for the disappeared search for anybody This would be also useful for the disappeared search for anybody, such as teenagers in running away, which would facilitate much the spot of the police officers in their research of more than our day more the share of the banked-up beds have cellphone. Dangerous monitoring of anybody, such as criminal very right coming out of prison and which its still under monitoring. That would make it possible to supervise their movements

With dimensions one amusing of this development would be for in love ones, it would enable them to supervise their boy friends

to conclude this system certain a number of positive thing such as facilitating would make it possible the work of the police force.

merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

This new technology could prove<n are> very interest<ed> ing* <for> in several circumstances. This innovation would make it possible to locate a person thanks to her/his cellphone.

(De quelle nouvelle technologie s'agit-il ? Tu ne le précises pas.)

*- interested = intéressé, sens passif <--> interesting = intéressant, sens actif.

For example this system of localization would make it possible to come to assistance <has> of certain <person> people in danger: in an avalanche in the mountain, or then when <certain person> they find themselves wounded at the time of an accident without being able <do not> to give their position.

This would be also useful for the <disappeared> search <for anybody> of missing people [This would be also useful for the disappeared search for anybody], such as runaway teenagers.<in running away, which>. It would facilitate much the <spot> work of <the> police officers in their research. [of more than our day more the share of the banked-up beds have cellphone.] <(totalement incompréhensible) [Dangerous monitoring of anybody, such as criminal very right coming out of prison and which its still under monitoring.] <(????) That would make it possible to supervise their movements.

<With dimensions one> An amusing <of this> development <would> could be imagined for <in love ones> lovers: it would enable them to supervise their boyfriends or girlfriends.

To conclude, I can point out that this system has at least a certain <a> number of positive <thing> uses <such as> among which facilitating <would make it possible> the work of the police force is an important one.

Merci d'avance,et merci pour la dernière fois....j'ai eu un bon devoir<s>!

=> On a souvent du mal à suivre le cheminement de ta pensée...

[yveslouis]

Alors, là ! Je dis chapeau bas. Chapeau bas à JRB qui s'est senti le courage de corriger ce texte qui sent la traduction automatique à plein nez. ( "à" traduit par "has", parce que mal écrit en français, sans doute, etc...)

[Jean B]

Alors, là ! Je dis chapeau bas. Chapeau bas à JRB qui s'est senti le courage de corriger ce texte qui sent la traduction automatique à plein nez. ( "à" traduit par "has", parce que mal écrit en français, sans doute, etc...)

[yveslouis]

Parfois, je me le demande aussi, fan de chichourle !