Anglais Correction Fautes Sur Les élections

[angelina18]

Bonjour à tous. Je viens d'effectuer un travail d'analyse des élections locales anglaises qui viennent d'avoir lieu récemment. Serait-il possible de m'aider à corriger les fautes d'orthographe (syntaxe, non-sens, grammaire...) ?

En vous remerciant d'avance pour votre aide.

The second may 2008 set the local election in England and Wales and especially the election of London’s mayor. This election took place in a particular context: Gordon Brown, Prime Minister, had his popularity at the lowest level. The local election represented his first electoral test like a trusty vote. In the same time in London, the post of mayor of London, came into play between mainly Ken Livingstone (actual mayor of London and twice elected) and Boris Johnson (member of the Parliament and candidate of the conservative party).

The results were disastrous for the Labour Party insomuch this day was called “The black Friday for Brown” (the worst result of the Labour for forty years). The Conservative Party leading by David Cameroon is victorious (it best performance since the local election of 1992). There were 4102 seats at issue in England and Wales: Labour lost 331 seats whereas the Conservatives won 256 seats and the Liberal Democrats progressed 34 seats. Thus, the Labour Party finished third (with just 24 per cent of the vote), the Liberal Democrats 25 per cent and the Conservatives (44 per cent). More than a defeat, this local election is a walloping for the Labour Party. It lost key councils such as Hartlepool, Reading, Wolverhampton... Moreover, in London, Boris Johnson from the Conservative Party was elected and put a stop to Ken Livingstone’s eight-year reign as London Mayor.

According to Gordon Brown, these results are due to the discontentment of the population at the hands of the hike of the cost of life. He blamed “difficult economic circumstances” too. However, according to analysis, the usury of power would be an explication: the Labour governs for eleven years. This usury is amplified by the crisis of real estate (which affected a lot the United-Kingdom), foul-ups around plan to abolish the fiscal edge of 10 % touching the lowest incomes, the rebellion of the Labour foundation faced with the continuation of custody and hesitancy of the team in power. The council tax may with bills now more than £1,200 per household would be a key factor too. Otherwise, this outcome would be seen like a protesting vote against the unloved Brown. The population who felled anguished and vulnerable at the hands of the economic situation and its impact on themselves could be a possible reason of this outcome too.

This defeat of the Labour Party reveals an evolution toward the centre right. It could be interpreted like a sign of a potential defeat to general elections for its which should take place before May 2010. According to Gordon Brown, this defeat is a message from the population: the government needs to take more into account his concerns. Thus, he has reshuffled his Cabinet: Margaret Beckett replaced Jack Straw as Foreign Secretary, and Charles Clarke was sacked as Home Secretary, to be replaced by John Reid. Consequently, according to Brown this outcome is a “warning shot” for the government and now Labour had to “renew" itself to deal with the challenges of the future”. On the other side, with its winning, now the Conservative Party needs to flesh out the party's policies and continue improving its performance.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Relis-toi toujours attentivement pour éliminer les fautes les plus criantes. Il n'y aura pas toujours quelqu'un pour le faire à ta place, particulièrement le jour J à l'heure H.

Attention au faux ami "actual".

Attention à ton usage du dictionnaire : vérifie toujours dans sa partie anglais-français que le mot choisi correspond bien à l'acception recherchée. Tu éviteras ainsi des impropriétés telles que "usury" = usure, celle de l'usurier au lieu de "wearing effect of power/time" = usure du pouvoir/temps.

Enfin, révise les verbes irréguliers, ce ne sera pas superflu.

<The second may 2008 set> The local elections in England and Wales and especially the election of <London’s mayor> the mayor of London occurred on May 2nd, 2008. This election took place in a particular context: Gordon Brown, the Prime Minister, had his popularity at the lowest level. The local election represented his first electoral test like a trusty vote. In the same time in London, the post of mayor of London, came into play between mainly Ken Livingstone (<actual> the present mayor of London and twice elected) and Boris Johnson (a member of <the> Parliament and candidate of the conservative party).

The results were disastrous for the Labour Party insomuch that this day was called “The black Friday for Brown” (the worst result of the Labour for forty years). The Conservative Party <leading> led by David Cameroon <is> was victorious (it best performance since the local election of 1992). There were 4102 seats at issue in England and Wales: Labour lost 331 seats whereas the Conservatives won 256 seats and the Liberal Democrats progressed to 34 seats. Thus, the Labour Party finished third (with just 24 per cent of the vote), the Liberal Democrats 25 per cent and the Conservatives (44 per cent). More than a defeat, this local election <is> was a walloping for the Labour Party. It lost key councils such as Hartlepool, Reading, Wolverhampton... Moreover, in London, Boris Johnson from the Conservative Party was elected and put a stop to Ken Livingstone’s eight-year reign as London Mayor.

According to Gordon Brown, these results are due to the discontentment of the population at the hands of the hike of the cost of life. He blamed “difficult economic circumstances” too. However, according to analysis, the <usury> wearing effect of being in power would be an explanation: the Labour has been governing for eleven years. This <usury> wearing effect is amplified by the crisis of real estate (which affected a lot the United-Kingdom), foul-ups around plan to abolish the fiscal edge of 10 % touching the lowest incomes, the rebellion of the Labour foundation faced with the continuation of custody and hesitancy of the team in power. The council tax <may> with bills now more than £1,200 per household would be a key factor too. Otherwise, this outcome would be seen like a protesting vote against the unloved Brown. The population who <felled> felt anguished and vulnerable at the hands of the economic situation and its impact on themselves could be a possible reason of this outcome too.

This defeat of the Labour Party reveals an evolution toward the centre right. It could be interpreted like a sign of a potential defeat to general elections <for its> which should take place before May 2010. According to Gordon Brown, this defeat is a message from the <population> people: the government needs to take their concerns more into account <his concerns>. Thus, he has reshuffled his Cabinet: Margaret Beckett replaced Jack Straw as Foreign Secretary, and Charles Clarke was sacked as Home Secretary, to be replaced by John Reid. Consequently, according to Brown this outcome is a “warning shot” for the government and now Labour had to “renew" itself to deal with the challenges of the future”. On the other side, with its winning, now the Conservative Party needs to flesh out the party's policies and continue improving its performance.