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[mel59]

J'ai besoin d'une petite correction. UN grand merci

First, money is very importante for society, indeed, we live in the world that is managed to money. It's very difficult to live without money. That is to say, generaly, people who don't have any money are left out society like tramps. They are not considerated like men and population is afraid of they. It's horrible because this categorie of people excluded are men like we, certainly with some problem due to generaly loss of employment. There is also a lot of people that come an another country and hope for have a better life because in your origin country, there is a war. They have to do beg for live. the worst is sometimes with this personn, there are children.

We are in the society more and more spendthrift, indeed, we are in consumer society and capitalist society.We are always driven to buy with television, promotion, advertising... It's very important to learn to manage money, that why , parent must learn to your children to use money. Indeed, pocket-money is a good training for understand that life is expensive. It's more easy to spend money than win. Moreover, even if money is indispensable: money doesn't make your happy.

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Malheureusement, je retrouve dans ce texte un certain nombre de fautes déjà signalées précédemment.

Dans ces conditions, je me demande à quoi peuvent bien servir mes corrections et s'il est bien utile que je les continue.

- people est un pluriel et gouverne un verbe pluriel.

- tu confonds les pronoms personnels sujet avec les pronoms personnels complément.

- there is + nom singulier <--> there are + nom pluriel.

- pour + infinitif = to + infinitif, jamais for.

- l'adjectif se place AVANT le nom qu'il qualifie.

- to learn = apprendre une leçon <--> to teach = apprendre qqch à qqn = enseigner.

- gagner une course/un match = to win a race/a match <--> gagner de l'argent = to earn money.

Conseil : enregistre chaque correction de manière à te constituer autant de "pense-bêtes" des erreurs à ne plus faire.

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First, money is very important<e> for society. Indeed, we live in <the> a world that is <managed> ruled <to> by money. It's very difficult to live without money. That is to say, generally, people who don't have any money are left out of society like tramps. They are not considered like men and <population> people <is> are afraid of the<y>m. It's horrible because this category of excluded people <excluded> are men like <we> us, certainly with some problems generally due to <generaly> loss of employment. There <is> are also a lot of people <that> who come <an> from another country and hope <for> to have a better life because there is war in <your> their country of origin <country, there is a war>. They have to <do> beg <for> to live. The worst is sometimes <with> when <this> these <personn, there are> people have children.

We are in <the society> a more and more spendthrift society, indeed, we <are> live in a consumer society and a capitalistic <society> one. We are always driven to buy <with> through television, promotion, advertising... It's very important to learn to manage money, that's why parents must <learn> teach to <your> their children how to use money. Indeed, pocket-money is a good training <for> to understand that life is expensive. It's <more easy> easier to spend money than <win> earn it. Moreover, even if money is indispensable: money <doesn't make your happy> can't buy happiness.

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[mel59]

Bonsoir,

Malheureusement, je retrouve dans ce texte un certain nombre de fautes déjà signalées précédemment.

Dans ces conditions, je me demande à quoi peuvent bien servir mes corrections et s'il est bien utile que je les continue.

- people est un pluriel et gouverne un verbe pluriel.

- tu confonds les pronoms personnels sujet avec les pronoms personnels complément.

- there is + nom singulier <--> there are + nom pluriel.

- pour + infinitif = to + infinitif, jamais for.

- l'adjectif se place AVANT le nom qu'il qualifie.

- to learn = apprendre une leçon <--> to teach = apprendre qqch à qqn = enseigner.

- gagner une course/un match = to win a race/a match <--> gagner de l'argent = to earn money.

Conseil : enregistre chaque correction de manière à te constituer autant de "pense-bêtes" des erreurs à ne plus faire.

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First, money is very important<e> for society. Indeed, we live in <the> a world that is <managed> ruled <to> by money. It's very difficult to live without money. That is to say, generally, people who don't have any money are left out of society like tramps. They are not considered like men and <population> people <is> are afraid of the<y>m. It's horrible because this category of excluded people <excluded> are men like <we> us, certainly with some problems generally due to <generaly> loss of employment. There <is> are also a lot of people <that> who come <an> from another country and hope <for> to have a better life because there is war in <your> their country of origin <country, there is a war>. They have to <do> beg <for> to live. The worst is sometimes <with> when <this> these <personn, there are> people have children.

We are in <the society> a more and more spendthrift society, indeed, we <are> live in a consumer society and a capitalistic <society> one. We are always driven to buy <with> through television, promotion, advertising... It's very important to learn to manage money, that's why parents must <learn> teach to <your> their children how to use money. Indeed, pocket-money is a good training <for> to understand that life is expensive. It's <more easy> easier to spend money than <win> earn it. Moreover, even if money is indispensable: money <doesn't make your happy> can't buy happiness.

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[mel59]

Bonsoir,

Malheureusement, je retrouve dans ce texte un certain nombre de fautes déjà signalées précédemment.

Dans ces conditions, je me demande à quoi peuvent bien servir mes corrections et s'il est bien utile que je les continue.

- people est un pluriel et gouverne un verbe pluriel.

- tu confonds les pronoms personnels sujet avec les pronoms personnels complément.

- there is + nom singulier <--> there are + nom pluriel.

- pour + infinitif = to + infinitif, jamais for.

- l'adjectif se place AVANT le nom qu'il qualifie.

- to learn = apprendre une leçon <--> to teach = apprendre qqch à qqn = enseigner.

- gagner une course/un match = to win a race/a match <--> gagner de l'argent = to earn money.

Conseil : enregistre chaque correction de manière à te constituer autant de "pense-bêtes" des erreurs à ne plus faire.

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First, money is very important<e> for society. Indeed, we live in <the> a world that is <managed> ruled <to> by money. It's very difficult to live without money. That is to say, generally, people who don't have any money are left out of society like tramps. They are not considered like men and <population> people <is> are afraid of the<y>m. It's horrible because this category of excluded people <excluded> are men like <we> us, certainly with some problems generally due to <generaly> loss of employment. There <is> are also a lot of people <that> who come <an> from another country and hope <for> to have a better life because there is war in <your> their country of origin <country, there is a war>. They have to <do> beg <for> to live. The worst is sometimes <with> when <this> these <personn, there are> people have children.

We are in <the society> a more and more spendthrift society, indeed, we <are> live in a consumer society and a capitalistic <society> one. We are always driven to buy <with> through television, promotion, advertising... It's very important to learn to manage money, that's why parents must <learn> teach to <your> their children how to use money. Indeed, pocket-money is a good training <for> to understand that life is expensive. It's <more easy> easier to spend money than <win> earn it. Moreover, even if money is indispensable: money <doesn't make your happy> can't buy happiness.

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[Jean B]

D'accord, tu te constitues des fiches et c'est très bien.

Mais ne les laisse pas dormir dans un tiroir !

Relis-les de temps en temps pour bien mémoriser les règles et ne pas refaire les mêmes erreurs.

C'est comme cela que tu progresseras.

Bonne continuation.