Correction

[lesly03]

Bonjours à tous j'ai un devoir maison à faire dont le sujet est: does television bring people together or on the contrary set them apart? Voila donc j'ai fait une petite rédaction si vous pouvez me corriger les fautes se serez gentil, merci d'avance.

Today the majority of the families have a television in their house. Larger with smallest everyone there looks at. Is a institution in certain families because it makes it possible to slacken us and to inform us. Therfore we can all discuss and exchange idea sof this we hears on television. Besides the television is a window open on the world, it enables us to see all that occurs in the world. What is more we informed are of the problems of people what makes it possible to protect us. Thanks to the various facts one knows what is done the world. In contrast to this aspect to the televison, she can to reproach a family point of view. When we look at a film one spends time together. As the result od this the television allows to bring us closer./

Nervertheless television can to separate because it take much of our time what could be used for another thing. One topl of that she can is dangerous because when it takes a too important place within the family, she destroy that. Before when television did not exist ate them in the calm one read before lying down today the most uses the telvision. Then our practices changed.

To conclude television have several aspects negative and positive the but it is of good in being useful. To make the difference between reality and this shows us

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

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Bonjour<s> à tous,

J'ai un devoir maison à faire dont le sujet est: does television bring people together or on the contrary set them apart? Voilà. Donc, j'ai fait une petite rédaction. Si vous pouvez me corriger les fautes, ce ser<ez>ait gentil. Merci d'avance. <Celles de français aussi.

=> Je me demande souvent comment j'ai bien pu survivre toutes ces années sans le secours de l'Internet ni celui des sites d'entraide...

Il est vrai que je n'attendais pas le dernier moment pour faire mon travail et que je comptais d'abord sur moi-même. Autres temps, autres moeurs...

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Je ne sais pas si tu te rends bien compte de la gravité de tes lacunes.

Petit florilège de ce que tu sembles ignorer :

- emploi du pronom sujet "she" pour un objet.

- emploi de l'article "the" à tort et à travers.

- emploi du S au présent du verbe quand son sujet est pluriel.

- modal suivi d'un infinitif complet.

- modal suivi d'une forme verbale conjuguée.

- emploi d'un verbe pluriel avec un sujet singulier.

- emploi des adjectifs après le nom.

Conclusion : mets-toi sans tarder au travail et sérieusement, faute de quoi tu cours droit à la catastrophe. Revois tes bases.

Il n'est jamais trop tard à condition que tu t'y mettes dès aujourd'hui.

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Au contraire, si tu t'estimes un tant soit peu, fais ce que je te conseille.

"Where there's a will, there's a way". = "Vouloir, c'est pouvoir".

Bon travail et bonne chance.