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[ERGNON]

Salut, voila je suis nouveau, on ma dit que ce forum etait pas mal alors, et bien aprés un petit tour je me suis inscrit:-)

Et vous aller jamais deviner mais pour lundi (celui qui vient, je sais je m'y prend un peut a la derniere minute) j'ai un devoir d'anglais a rendre. Et comme je suis pas une fleche en anglais je me demandais si par le plus grand des hazard vous ne pourriez pas jetez un petit coup d'oeil sur mon devoir...

Voila

Le sujet, c'est: If you had the choice, do you consider home shooling ? Why ? Why not ?

"I hate this teacher, and his stupid lesson!". Everybody who were going in the shool have think this "au moin une fois".

But if we had the choice between to work in our house and at school, what we will do ?

Of course, home schooling present a lot of possibilities.

Of course with it, we are also a little our self-shoolmaster.

Of course we can wake up when we want, work in our pace without to be disturb by our schoolmate who wants takes our glu.

Of course it ensures to us an easier organisation and an personal follow up.

Of course parents who are intersted by home schooling say that they can control what their children do and see them everyday.

And of course if we are handicaped we haven't to go to school.

But doesn't it deprives us of the social side of the life ?

Because even if it's unbelievable, highshool have many enjoy aspects.

Thus going to school we may meet persons that we never meet if we stay at home, see our friends, speak to them and learn to them.

I think that is very important both for the education and the development of every children.

And if we don't go to school, and meet anybody, on our birthday, anyone will coming and we will receveid any gifts.

Is not funny, no ?

Morever when we go to school, we confront the look of the others and so we learn how to manage stress and how to speak in front of somebody.

This is what we are supposed to do during an oral examination.

At the end of the day, if I had the choice between work in my house and at school, I choose school because as we say: "The more, the merrier", and I prefere laugh with my friend instead of cry alone in my room.

Is'nt living with others, the main responsability of man ? Don't we have only one life ?

So let's start right now.

Merci d'avance.

A+

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

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Salut,

Voilà je suis nouveau, on m'a dit que ce forum n'était pas mal alors, et bien après un petit tour je me suis inscrit:-)

Et vous allez jamais deviner mais pour lundi (celui qui vient, je sais je m'y prends un peu<t> à la dernière minute) j'ai un devoir d'anglais à rendre. Et comme je suis pas une flèche en anglais je me demandais si par le plus grand des hasards vous ne pourriez pas jeter un petit coup d'oeil sur mon devoir...

Voilà => Si ton niveau d'anglais est égal à celui du français, je sens que je ne vais pas m'amuser...

Le sujet, c'est: If you had the choice, do you consider home schooling ? Why ? Why not ?

"I hate this teacher, and his stupid lesson!". <Everybody> All those who <were> have <going> been <in> to <the> school have thought this <"au moin une fois"> at least once.

But if we had the choice between <to> working <in our house> at home and at school, what <we will> would we do ?

Of course, home schooling <present> offers a lot of possibilities.

Of course with it, we are also a little our self-schoolmaster.

Of course we can wake up when we want, work in our pace without <to> being disturbed by our schoolmate who wants to take<s> our glue.

Of course it ensures <to> us an easier organization and a<n> personal follow up.

Of course parents who are interested by home schooling say that they can control what their children do and see them everyday.

And of course if we are handicapped we haven't to go to school.

But doesn't it deprive<s> us of the social side of <the> life?

Because even if it's unbelievable, high school ha<ve>s many enjoyable aspects.

Thus going to school we may meet <persons> people that we would never meet if we stayed at home, see our friends, speak to them and learn <to> with them.

I think that it is very important both for the education and the development of every child<ren>.

And if we don't go to school, and meet anybody, on our birthday, <anyone> nobody will come and we will receve<id> <any> no gifts.

This is not funny, <no> isn't it?

Morever when we go to school, we confront the look of the others and so we learn how to manage stress and how to speak in front of somebody.

This is what we are supposed to do during an oral examination.

At the end of the day, if I had the choice between working <in my house> at home and at school, I would choose school because as we say: "The more, the merrier", and I prefer<e> to laugh with my friends instead of crying alone in my room.

Is'nt living with others, the main responsibility of man ? Don't we only have <only> one life ?

So let's start right now.

Merci d'avance.

A+

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Hélas, c'est bien ce que je craignais.

Petit florilège :

- sujet singulier avec verbe pluriel.

- absence de S au présent du verbe dont le sujet est singulier.

- infinitif au lieu du gérondif après une préposition.

- an devant un mot commençant par p. Celle-là, il fallait la faire !

- verbe conjugué dans une question avec does.

- sujet pluriel avec verbe singulier. Il fallait bien que tu commettes les deux !

- méconnaissance d'une simple concordance des temps.

Il est grand temps que tu te mettes sérieusement au travail pour combler des lacunes indignes d'un niveau de Première.

Il n'est pas trop tard si tu en as la volonté et si tu t'en donnes vraiment les moyens.

Un conseil pour finir : inscris-toi sur anglaisfacile.com et travailles-y assidûment en commençant par les bases de la phrase.

Le site fourmille de ressources en tout genre qui sont toutes gratuites bien sûr.

"Vouloir, c'est pouvoir" = "Where there's a will, there's a way".

Bon travail et bonne chance.

[ERGNON]

Merci beaucoup JRB, grace a toi ma moyenne va remonter! je pense aussi que je vais m'inscrire aussi sur anglaisfacile.com, en tout cas ca coute rien d'esseyer ;-))

Thanks

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup JRB, grace a toi ma moyenne va remonter! je pense aussi que je vais m'inscrire aussi sur anglaisfacile.com, en tout cas ca coute rien d'esseyer ;-))

Thanks