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Bonjour,

Je devais m'exprimer sur l'état du monde dans cent ans, j'aimerai que vous corrigiez mes fautes...

Un grand merci!

Bonne soirée.

Petrol rising-prices, oil sticks, glaciers melting... All is not hunky-dory… No one knows what the future holds for us, but we can imagine the repercussions of the human-being activities on Earth.

Our team investigated during one month close to environmental experts so as to imagine the world in the next 100 years.

Each winter, you are astonished not to see the snow coming down in front of your house whereas where you were child, you made snowman with your friends ?

The global warming is on the march since several decades, increasing year after year…

If we compare the temperatures-reading since 1950, we can see the temperature is increasing more and more each decade.

In 2100, deserts will be more and more numerous and starvation will affect the whole of Africa, climbing back to Europe...

Human beings, whom rejected oils and nitrogene oxides since ages and responsible for holes in the ozone layer, will shelter under cavities because of sunrays which will be source of skin cancer.

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Petrol rising-prices, oil sticks, glaciers melting... All is not hunky-dory… No one knows what the future holds for us, but we can imagine the repercussions of the human-being activities on Earth.

Our team investigated during one month close to environmental experts so as to imagine the world in the next 100 years.

Each winter, are you are astonished not to see the snow coming down in front of your house whereas where when you were child, you made snowmen with your friends?

The Global warming is has been on the march since move for several decades, increasing year after year…

If we compare the temperatures-reading lists since 1950, we can see the temperature is increasing more and more each decade.

In 2100, deserts will be more and more numerous and starvation will affect the whole of Africa, climbing back up to Europe...

Human beings, whom have rejected oils and nitrogene oxides since for ages and are responsible for holes in the ozone layer, will shelter under cavities because of sunrays which will be source of skin cancer.

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Bonjour,

Petrol rising prices, oil sticks, glaciers melting... All is not hunky-dory… No one knows what the future holds for us, but we can imagine the effects / repercussions of the human being activities on Earth.

Our team investigated during one month close to environmental experts so as to imagine the world in the next 100 years.

Each winter, you are astonished not to see the snow coming down in front of your house whereas, when you were a child, you made a snowman with your friends.

<The> Global warming <is> has been on the <march> move <since> for several decades, increasing year after year…

If we compare <the> temperature<s> readings since 1950, we can see <the temperature> it <is> has been increasing more and more each decade.

In 2100, deserts will be more and more numerous and starvation will affect the whole of Africa, <climbing back to> reaching as far north as Europe...

Human beings, who<m rejected> had been throwing out oils and nitrogene oxides <since> for ages and had been responsible for holes in the ozone layer, will shelter under cavities because of sunrays which will be source of skin cancer.

* Il semble que j'aie été trop lent sur ce coup-là ! :lol:

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Merci beaucoup pour la correction...

Aïe Aïe, pas mal de lacunes!

Je suis erasmus en Espagne à Séville, et l'espagnol passe par-dessus l'anglais, j'ai intérêt à m'y remettre sérieusement!

MERCI !

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Merci beaucoup pour la correction...

Aïe Aïe, pas mal de lacunes!

Je suis erasmus en Espagne à Séville, et l'espagnol passe par-dessus l'anglais, j'ai intérêt à m'y remettre sérieusement!

MERCI !

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