Correction Et Aide

[Sofia_999]

Bonjour tout le monde...j'aurais besoin d'aide dans ma redaction d'anglais j'ai deja fait la redaction mais elle n'est pas toujours complete et il y a bcp de fautes d'ortographes donc j'apprecierais si quelqu'un pourrais y ajouter quelques idees et corriger ... merci bcp

donc voila le sujet : IN YOUR OPINION ARE WOMRN COMPLETLY EMANCIPATED NOW OR DO THEY STILL HAVE A LONG WAY TO GO ( GIVE EXAMPLES) :

my essay : The issue of women's right differs from one country to another . If we discuss European and American community , we find that women are equals to men in everything .

In jobs , we find women doing the same masculine work , for example they drive trucks , work in :mines , discoveries , judging and many others.

We even find that they elect themselves to presidential status , as Hilary Clinton is doing nowadays in America , and Andira Ghandi did in India.

This kind of equality that women should have is lackink in the Arab countries. Arabic women demand their freedom and claim for equality and they try to take it ; from the outside they seem took it already but if we go deep in the problem we find that most arabic countries dont accept the fact that women should be independant and not weaker than the men . The idea that men are the masters in every domain whether in the house or at work, or in the rulling arena is still in many brain in all over the world . Some society and human still think that women cannot take decisions and sometimes they even think that they are indiscussable .

Yet women are doing their best to prove themselves ,make their equality and fight for their rights.

To conclude i would like to say that in my opinion i think that if women try hard their situation will improve in some parts of the world but they are still not emancipated and they will never be because some people and society will always be not cultivated enough to accept such an idea.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

The issue of women's rights differs from one country to another. If we discuss European and American communities, we find that women are equal<s> to men in everything.

In jobs, we find women doing the same masculine work, for example they drive trucks, work in mines, make discoveries, are judges and many others.

We even find that they elect themselves to presidential status, as Hilary Clinton is doing nowadays in America, and Indira Ghandi did in India.

This kind of equality that women should have is lackink in the Arab countries. Arabic women demand their freedom and claim for equality and they try to take it; from the outside <they> it seems they took it already but if we go deeper into the problem we find that most Arabic countries dont accept the fact that women should be independent and not weaker than <the> men . The idea that men are the masters in every domain, whether in the house or at work, or in the ruling arena is still in many <brain> minds <in> all over the world. Some societies and humans still think that women cannot take decisions and sometimes they even think that they are <indiscussable> ?? indisputable ??

Yet women are doing their best to prove themselves, make their equality and fight for their rights.

To conclude I would like to say that in my opinion, <i think that><(pléonasme !) if women try hard, their situation will improve in some parts of the world but they are still not emancipated and they will never be because some people and societies will always be not cultivated enough to accept such an idea.

* Good job!

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