Correction En Anglais

[kk976]

Bonjour, Pourriez-vous me corriger cet écrit. Le sujet : Pourquoi devenir un « attorney » ?

Je vous remercie par avance.

Maeva.

I want to become an attorney in commercial law for many reasons; The true nature of the legal profession is unlike the image of attorneys depicted in movies and television. Unfortunately, I know law practice isn't always fascinating and intellectually stimulating. In fact, it can be boring, stressful and even unfulfilling at times. And I don’t want to save, run, or buy the world,

But, in my opinion, it is very interesting to meet people, try to settle theirs problems. Even if, I am intend of working corporate forming, formation, compulsory liquidation, performance.( ur les formations de societe, sur leur fonctionnement, sur leur dissolution, sur les redressements et liquidation judiciaires).

Next, I know there a lot of opportunities in this branch of law, and I hope to become integrate of consulting firm, or elaborate my consultancy enterprise.

Then, I do not like studying that much, but I really love to debate issues.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I want to become an attorney in commercial law for many reasons. The true nature of the legal profession is unlike the image of attorneys depicted in movies and on television. Unfortunately, I know law practice isn't always fascinating and intellectually stimulating. In fact, it can be boring, stressful and even unfulfilling at times. And I don't want to save, run, or buy the world.

But, in my opinion, it is very interesting to meet people, try to settle their<s>(l'adjectif possessif, pas le pronom) problems. Even if I <am> intend <of> to work<ing> on corporate forming, <formation> running , compulsory liquidation, performance.( ur les formations de societe, sur leur fonctionnement, sur leur dissolution, sur les redressements et liquidation judiciaires).(Cette phrase débutant par "Même si j'ai l'intention de...", il lui manque une seconde partie, non ? A moins que tu ne la relies à la phrase précédente ?)

Next, I know there are a lot of opportunities in this branch of law, and I hope to become integrated <of> into a consulting firm, or elaborate my own consultancy <enterprise> company.

Then, I do not like studying that much, but I really love to debate issues.

[kk976]

Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.

Maeva

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.

Maeva