Correction Des Fautes

[berrylove]

Bonjour, pourriez vous me dire ou sont les fautes et les corriger s'il vous plaît ???

Tout d'abord, je vais faire la traduction de ces lignes :

I like their optimism, their youth, the way their lives are not yet set in stone. And I admire their nerve, coming halfway round the world to master another language.

So why do they dislike me so much ?

Traduction en français (à corriger) :

J'aime leur optimisme, leur jeunesse, le chemin de leurs vies n'est pas encore ancrée dans la pierre. Et j'admire leur courage, arrivée à mi-chemin autour du Monde pour maîtriser une autre langue.

Donc, pourquoi me détestent ils tellement ?

Expression personnelle (à corriger) :

Do you think studies are compatible with a part-time job ?

A lot of students need to work for to win money for to finance their studies, and for to live.It's not the all students who have chance to have parents or family who have the way to pay studies of their children. A lot of students must work and study all at once. However, is it work and study all at once father failure ?

A student needs a lot of nerve for to can work and study all at once because it is very difficult.Studies ask a lot of energize and the work ask a lot of more. Tiredness prevent to concentrate in class because the work take all energize. But, then why to work ? It's essential for a student to work, because he mut finance his studies and he must live. Often, the students have a family who haven't the ways to finance studies so, for to continue to study, they must work, moreover studies are very expansive.

A lot of students haven't a good hygiene's life, so their health isn't good. This is due to stress, pressure, and tiredness. This can bring about the faileure.

To conclude, studies can be compatible with a part-time job, if the student have a lot of willpower and courage because it is very difficult.

Je vous remercie d'avance.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

J'aime leur optimisme, leur jeunesse, <le chemin de> la façon dont leur<s> vie<s> n'est pas encore ancrée dans la pierre. Et j'admire leur courage, <arrivée à mi-chemin autour> de venir faire la moitié du tour du monde pour maîtriser une autre langue.

Donc/Alors, pourquoi me détestent-ils tellement ?

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A lot of students need to work <for> <(pour/afin de + infinitif = to/in order to + infinitif) to win money <for> <(pour + nom = for) to finance their studies, and <for> (to) live. <It's not the> All students <who> have not the chance to have parents or a family who <have the way> can afford to pay for their children's studies <of their children>. A lot of students must both work and study all at <once> the same time. However, <is it> does working and studying all at once <father> cause failure?

A student needs a lot of nerve <for> to <can> <(un modal n'a pas d'infinitif !) be able to work and study all at once because it is very difficult. Studies <ask> require a lot of energy and <the> work <ask> requires a lot <of> more. Tiredness prevents <to> from concentrating in class because <the> work takes up all the energy. But, then why <to> work? It's essential for a student to work, because he must finance his studies and he must live. Often, <the> students have a family who haven't the <ways> means to finance studies. <so, for to continue to study,> That is the reason why they must work to go on studying. Moreover studies are very expensive.

A lot of students have<n't> <a good> bad <hygiene 's life> living conditions, so their health isn't good. This is due to stress, pressure, and tiredness. This can bring about the failure.

To conclude, studies can be compatible with a part-time job, if <the> students have a lot of willpower and courage because it is very difficult.

* Conseil : entre autres choses, revois les cas d'omission du déterminant "the". Tu as un problème à ce niveau-là.

[berrylove]

Je vous remercie beaucoup, dés que je peux je me mets à revoir le déterminant "the", merci pour votre conseil.