Besoin De Correction

[kavi]

Bonjour, voilà je doit écrire une lettre de 300 mots en anglais, je l'ai déjà écrite mais il y a beaucoup de fautes, est ce que vous voulez bien me corriger svp :

I hope my letter will find you healthy and happy, Mama Juanita too, give her my best's wishes and tell her I miss her so much! For the other hand, for answered for your letter said, if I fell well in America.

In fact, the life in America it's very different be report at what I think.

I am doing my best to resist in my new life situation but it's not easy because peoples over here are so speed that they don't even have time to stop and talk. I truly wonder if they realise how much they are stress. The most difficult is to understand why they act like this even if I make effort to. I though it was because of my skin different because, indeed, there are a lots of racism and criminality in this place. And with my accent, I make understand me nowhere. Nobody wants to help me to find the place I was looking for but it just comes from the way of life of this country, like they say: "time is money"!

Since I arrive I visited my nearest neigh borough but San Francisco is really a huge city, there are Overcrowding in this city, and my studio is on the middle of the mountain, easy to go down but hard to go back.

Certainly, America it's a big country but everywhere is Dirty, it's very different to Puerto Rico, you know.

And, I'm so power with my some money whereas there is lots of Expense. The taxes, loyers, food, clothes, I'm Overwhelmed.

The life it's very difficult for an immigrant in America, and I regret to come here. If you have intention to come here, I give you an advice of friend, don't come here, and do not the same fault that me.

On my next letter I will send you photos of the places where I leave and my room too for show you the Miserere in what I live.

Big hugs; take care about all ours, especially mama Juanita! God bless her.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I hope my letter will find you healthy and happy, Mama Juanita too, give her my best<'s> wishes and tell her I miss her so much! <For> On the other hand, <for> to answer<ed> <for> what your letter said, <if > I feel well in America.

In fact, <the> life in America <it'> <(pas de double sujet en anglais) is very different <be report at> from what I thought it was.

I am doing my best to resist in my new life situation but it's not easy because people<s> <(c'est déjà un pluriel) over here are <so speed> in such a hurry that they don't even have time to stop and talk. I truly wonder if they realise how much stressed they are. <stress> The most difficult thing is to understand why they act like this even if I make an effort to. I thought it was because of my skin <different> colour because, indeed, there <are> is a lot<s> of racism and criminality in this place. And with my accent, I make myself understood <me> nowhere. Nobody wants to help me to find the place I was looking for but it just comes from the way of life <of> in this country, like they say: "time is money"!

Since I arrived I visited my nearest neighbourhood but San Francisco is really a huge city, there <are> is overcrowding in this city, and my studio is <on the middle of the mountain> halfway uphill, easy to go down but hard to go back.

Certainly, America <it'> is <(bis !) a big country but <everywhere> it is dirty everywhere, it's very different <to> from Puerto Rico, you know.

And, I'm so poor with my <some> little money whereas there <is> are <(there is + singulier > there are + pluriel) lots of expenses. <The> Taxes, <loyers> rent <(pas de dictionnaire ?) , food, clothes, I'm overwhelmed. (pourquoi ces majuscules au milieu des phrases ? Serais-tu germanisante ?)

<The> Life <it'> is <(et de trois !) very difficult for an immigrant in America, and I <regret to> wish I hadn't come here. If you <have> intend to come here, <I> let me give you a friendly piece of advice <of friend>, don't come here, and do not do the same <fault> mistake <that me> as I did.

On my next letter I will send you photos of the places where I <leave> <(relis-toi donc !) live and my room too <for show> so that you can see for yourself the <Miserere> poverty in <what> which I live.

Big hugs; take care <about> of all ours, especially mama Juanita! God bless her.

* Apprends à te relire attentivement d'un oeil critique, cela t'évitera un certain nombre de bourdes préjudiciables.

[kavi]

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[Jean B]

* Apprends à te relire attentivement d'un oeil critique, cela t'évitera un certain nombre de bourdes préjudiciables.

ok, à vrai dire sa fait 3 ans que j'apprend rien avec mes profs, je suis devenu plus nulle qu'au collége, bref, en tout cas j'apprend mieux avec vos correction, merci beaucoup d'avoir pris le temps de corriger .