Dm D'anglais

[julie59]

BOnjour à tous !!!

Je dois écrire sur deux sujets en anglais : "Aerobics is outdated" Discuss et What work experience do you have. J'ai déjà écrit sur ces deux sujets seulement je me suis beaucoup aidée du logiciel de traduction systran pour les faire (parce que je suis vraiment pas douée en anglais) et donc ça serait sympa qu'une âme charitable puisse relire cette horreur pour que je puisse le rendre la semaine prochaine. MERci BeAuCOuP !!!

>>Aerobics is outdated...

I do not think that aerobics is an outdated activity on the contrary this one knows a growing enthusiasm: it became very popular and very appreciated with the wire of time.

Indeed, this one is very appreciated because it has multiple benefits on the organization: it improve circulation, tone up the muscles, help the flexibility, reduced the disease risk cardiovascular, it makes it possible to acquire a physical good condition and a better knowledge of its body.

It has also benefits of a nature muscular, articular, pulmonary and psychological.

In addition to its benefits on the organization, aerobics also attracts by preoccupation with an esthetics. The thinness having become a very important criterion of beauty, good number of women are rush in the rooms of aerobics to keep the line.

Moreover this sporting discipline many people attract: they are not exclusively reserved to the teenagers and to the young girls but also to the active women and to the housewives. Aerobics thus touches all the age brackets. The meetings of aerobics are exempted on involving musics and are directed towards the dance what makes them convivial and ludic.

This passion for aerobics can also result in the fact that this activity can be practiced as well groups some as at home. These last years, of many clubs of sport opened their door to answer the growing success of aerobics. New alternatives of aerobics developed such as the body attack, the step, the cardio funk, the body balances….

>>Work experience...

I worked as a veterinary secretary in a cabinet: I remember it very well it was during the heat wave in 2003.

I accommodated the customers, I served them in drugs for the animals. I took the appointments for the operations or simple consultations. I made also the telephone reception which was for the majority of the urgencies. I assisted the veterinary surgeon during the operations.

From time to time I work as waitress for my aunt who is caterer at the time of marriages, birthdays, communions… it is in general very tiring because one early begins the morning and one finishes the evening very late: that represents approximately 18 hours of works not stop but is very well pay.

I also worked in a center of assistance by work for people handicapped in August 2004 and 2003. I helped them to carry out their tasks. They made all kinds of activities like vinegar conditioning, rice, of flour, they assembled sorters… that to vary according to the request of the companies. I have a very good memory of this work, in particular of handicapped with which I worked.

This summer I worked during two months and half in a supermarket as a warehouseman, I were to fill the rays, to make the orders, to install the new products and publicities. It was very tiring because it is necessary to rise to 5:00 the every day (except Sunday of course) and because it is very “physical”: paperboards should be carried, to move pallets. I do not have very a good memory of these track records.

[julie59]

est-ce que je vais avoir une réponse ?

[Jean B]

est-ce que je vais avoir une réponse ?

[julie59]

Oui je sais c'est pas bien mais je suis vraiment nulle en anglais et je voudrais pas redoubler ma deuxième année de kiné juste pour ça. Les dissertations que je dois écrire compte à 30% dans ma note finale en anglais. Si je fais ces dissertations par moi même il va te falloir au moins une semaine pour les corriger ou peut-être seulement pour les comprendre alors...tant pis je me ferais aider par quelqu'un d'autre !!! merci quand même d'avoir répondu !

[Jean B]

Oui je sais c'est pas bien mais je suis vraiment nulle en anglais et je voudrais pas redoubler ma deuxième année de kiné juste pour ça. Les dissertations que je dois écrire compte à 30% dans ma note finale en anglais. Si je fais ces dissertations par moi même il va te falloir au moins une semaine pour les corriger ou peut-être seulement pour les comprendre alors...tant pis je me ferais aider par quelqu'un d'autre !!! merci quand même d'avoir répondu !

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

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>>Aerobics is outdated...

I do not think that aerobics is an outdated activity. On the contrary I BELIEVE <this one> IT knows a growing enthusiasm AMONG PEOPLE: it HAS becOme very popular and <very> MUCH appreciated <with the wire of><(ça, c'est le fil de fer !) AS time GOES BY.

Indeed, <this one> IT is <very> MUCH appreciated because it has multiple benefits on the <organization> BODY: it improveS BLOOD circulation, toneS up the muscles, helpS <the> flexibility, reduceS <the disease risk> cardiovascular DISEASES RISKS, it makes it possible to acquire a physical good condition and a better knowledge of <its> YOUR body.

It <has> IS also benefi<ts>CIAL <of a nature> TO <muscular> MUSCLES, <articular> JOINTS, <pulmonary> LUNGS and <psychological> PSYCHE.

In addition to its benefits on the <organization> BODY, aerobics also attracts <by preoccupation with> FROM an Aesthetic POINT OF VIEW. <The> thinness having become a very important criterion of beauty, A good number of women <are> rush <in> TO <the rooms of> aerobics GYMS to <keep the line> HAVE A SLIM FIGURE.

Moreover this sporting discipline <many people> attractS MANY PEOPLE<(écrirais-tu comme parle Yoda, le Maître Jedi ?): they are not exclusively reserved to <the> teenagers and to <the young> girls but also to <the> active women and to <the> housewives. Aerobics thus touches all the age <brackets> GROUPS. <The meetings of> aerobics MEETINGS are <exempted> GIVEN on <involving> STIRRING musics and are directed towards <the> dance,<what> WHICH makes them convivial and ludic.

This passion for aerobics can also result in the fact that this activity can be practiSed <as well> IN groups <some> AS WELL as at home. These last years, <of> many <clubs of> sportS CLUBS <opened their door> WERE CREATED to answer the growing success of aerobics. New alternatives of aerobics developed such as the body attack, the step, the cardio funk, the body balances….

>>Work experience...

I worked as a <veterinary> secretary <in a cabinet> TO A VETERINARY SURGEON. I remember it very well BECAUSE it was during the heat wave in 2003.

I accommodated the customers, I served them <in> WITH drugs for theIR animals. I <took> MADE the appointments for <the> operations or simple consultations. I ALSO <made also> ANSWERED the telephone <reception> CALLS which <was> WERE EMERGENCIES for the MOST <majority of the urgencies>. I assisted the veterinary surgeon during <the> operations.

From time to time I workED as A waitress for my aunt who is A caterer at the time of marriages, birthdays, communions… It is in general very tiring because <one early> I begAn EARLY IN the morning and <one> finisheD VERY LATE IN the evening <very late>: that representD approximately 18 hours of work noN stop but is WAS very well paID.

I also worked in a center of assistance by work for <people> handicapped PEOPLE in August 2004 and 2003. I helped them to carry out their tasks. They made all kinds of activities like vinegar conditioning, rice, or flour, they assembled sorters… <that to> IT COULD vary according to the request of the companies. I have a very good memory of this work, in particular of THE handicapped PEOPLE with whOM I worked.

<This> LAST summer I worked during two months and A half in a supermarket as a warehouseman. I <were> HAD to fill the <rays> COUNTERS, to <make> CARRY OUT <the> orders, to install the new products and publicities. It was very tiring because it <is> WAS necessary to <rise to> GET UP AT 5:00 <the> every day (except ON Sunday of course) and because it <is> WAS very “physical”: paperboards should be carried, to move pallets. I do not have <very> a VERY good memory of these track records.

[yveslouis]

Je crois que JRB va être obligé de commander un stylo rouge au papa Noël. :P

[Jean B]

Je crois que JRB va être obligé de commander un stylo rouge au papa Noël. :P

[julie59]

Merci beaucoup pour la traduction. En effet, le traducteur ça n'aide pas vraiment!!

[Jean B]

Merci beaucoup pour la traduction. En effet, le traducteur ça n'aide pas vraiment!!

[julie59]

Oui c'est clair !! Je crois que je vais acheter un livre d'anglais et m'y mettre sérieusement!