Correction De Petites Fautes

[chacha7611]

Bonjour à tous, j'ai fais une petite rédaction en anglais et j'aimerais que vous me corrigiez mes fautes...

Merci d'avance à vous

Cordialement,

This article, written by T. Crampton, deals with the law of smoking ban in France, which has been voted in November 2006 and ban smoking in public areas.

Under existing laws dating back to the early 1990’s, separate smoking areas are already supposed to have been set aside for smokers, but in practice the rule has rarely been enforced. Indeed, government takes measure because, in France 30 % of the population smokes. It is more than any other European country except Greece, where 42 % light up. In France, passive smoking kills about 13 people a day and the situation is unacceptable. In fact, it represents 5.000 death owned by passive smoking, and 66.000 people dead per year due to smoking.

Ireland was the first country in the world to ban smoking in all enclosed workplaces in March 2004. This ban is now extending to outside buildings on a voluntary basis. The only country in the world to have banned the sale and smoking of tobacco is Bhutan since early 2005. This country is located in Himalaya Mountains, sandwiched between India and China in South Asia. And there is a population around 672.425 inhabitants. Moreover, in the world we count about sixty countries which have laws for ban smoking in different areas, including France.

In France Smoking is now banned in all public places (stations, museums, etc.); an exception exists for special smoking rooms fulfilling drastic conditions. However, a special exemption is made for cafés and restaurants, clubs, casinos, bars, etc. until January 1, 2008. The two phase of the ban has created some confusion among hotel managers, cafés owners and customers. Hotels, for example, are considered public spaces, except for rooms, which are private. According to a poll, 70% of the French support the ban. Those found in breach of the ban would be fined: 75€ for individuals and 150€ for the premises where the offence occurred. For these lacking sufficient inner strength to break the habit, the government will help by reimbursing up to 65€ per person per year for stop-smoking aids. It will also allow companies to invest in strictly regulated special smoking rooms inside the workplace.

In spite of the decrease of smoking is better for the health, some people are against this law. Indeed, owners of cafés highlight the fact that to one side they sell cigarettes and to another side they ban smoking in their shop. So they probably will lose customers. It probably may alter the image of France as a country socially defined in part by its smoky cafés. However, companies of tobacco think of they most likely lose selling.

According to me, I think of it is a good law because it is very insufferable when you go in a place like a restaurant or in a nightclub if you breathe lot of smoke. Your wears smell a bad tang and you probably do not want to risk having a disease.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Voici ce que j'ai remarqué et rectifié.

This article, written by T. Crampton, deals with the law of smoking ban in France, which was(action passée, terminée, datée = preterit) voted in November 2006 to ban smoking in public areas.

Under existing laws dating back to the early 1990’s, separate smoking areas are already supposed to have been equipped for smokers, but in practice the rule has rarely been enforced. Indeed, the government takes measure because, in France 30 % of the population smoke.(sujet pluriel) It is more than any other European country except Greece, where 42 % light up. In France, passive smoking kills about 13 people a day and the situation is unacceptable. In fact, it represents 5.000 deaths due to passive smoking, and 66.000 people die every year because of smoking.

Ireland was the first country in the world to ban smoking in all enclosed workplaces in March 2004. This ban is now extending to outside buildings on a voluntary basis. The only country in the world to have banned the sale and smoking of tobacco is Bhutan since early 2005. This country is located in the Himalayas , sandwiched between India and China in South Asia. And there is a population around 672.425 inhabitants. Moreover, in the world we count about sixty countries which have laws to ban smoking in different areas, including France.

In France Smoking is now banned in all public places (stations, museums, etc.); an exception exists for special smoking rooms fulfilling drastic conditions. However, a special exemption is made for cafés and restaurants, clubs, casinos, bars, etc. until January 1, 2008. The two phases of the ban have created some confusion among hotel managers, cafés owners and customers. Hotels, for example, are considered as public spaces, except for rooms, which are private. According to a poll, 70% of the French support the ban. Those found in breach of the ban would be fined: 75€ for individuals and 150€ for the premises where the offence occurred. For those lacking sufficient inner strength to break the habit, the government will help by reimbursing up to 65€ per person per year for stop-smoking aids. It will also allow companies to invest in strictly regulated special smoking rooms inside the workplace.

In spite of the decrease of smoking which is better for the health, some people are against this law. Indeed, owners of cafés highlight the fact that on the one hand they sell cigarettes and on the other hand they ban smoking in their shop. So they will probably lose customers. It may also alter the image of France as a country socially defined in part by its smoky cafés. However, tobacco companies think they will most likely lose sales.

According to me,(sinon, pléonasme !)=> it is a good law because it is highly unbearable to breathe lots of smoke when you go in a place like a restaurant or a nightclub. Your clothes smell a bad tang and you probably do not want to risk having a disease.

[chacha7611]

Thank you very much

Have a good end of the day ;=

[Jean B]

You're welcome.

Have a nice evening too.