Correction Expression Personnelle

[noma1]

Bonjour, pouvez vous me corriger s'il vous plait. Merci d'avance

The friendship is very important and takes an essential place in my life. The friends are people of confidence, who can listen to us, us to advise. My friends, I need to often see them to pass from good moments with them: the exits... Even if some are far from me, one always remains in contact by telephone, emails but one tries to see oneself as often as possible. The friendship is present, if one ends up reconciling oneself, after an argument, if not that wants to say that the people were not really friendly. That learns to us to accept them such as they are, with their qualities and their defects. I think that the friendship girl-boy is difficult to conceive. If there is friendship between them, it is that there was a bringing together, but not pain-killer. Inevitably, one of the two people wishes more than of the friendship.

In the life, one will never finish being made friends. Of course, one cannot be to appreciate by everyone

Affinities are not the same one for all. The friendship, it is a kind of relation which one to create is even with the others. Like says the proverb: "his family is not chosen, but one chooses his friends".

[melissandre]

Bonjour,

J'ai apporté quelques corrections mais je n'ai pas compris certaines phrases.

Friendship is very important and plays an important role in my life. Friends are people we can have confidence in, they can listen to us and advise us. I often need to see my friends to have a good time with them and to go out. Even if some are far from me, we always keep in touch either by telephone or email but we try to see us as often as possible. Friendship exists if we finally kiss and make up after a quarrel, if it is not the case, we can say that people are not really friendly. This learns us to accept them such as they are, with their qualities and their flaws. I think that friendship between a girl and a boy is difficult to consider. (If there is friendship between them, it is that there was a bringing together, but not pain-killer???) Inevitably, one of them wishes more than friendship.

In life,(one will never finish being made friends??). Of course, one cannot be appreciated by everyone.

Affinities are not the same for all. Friendship is a kind of relation we create with the others. As it is said: "You can choose your friends but not your family".

[yveslouis]

Je te propose deux petites modifications :

This learns us to accept them > This teaches us to accept them...

As it is said: "You can..." > As they say : "You can..."

D'autre part, garde cette formule : "Of course, one cannot be appreciated by everyone." qui est juste.

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[pops]

Pense aux mots de liaison, tu peux commencer ton texte par "As far as I'm concerned I find that" en ce qui me concerne je trouve que....

Friends are people we can have confidence in, they can listen to us and advise us.